Earn Your Keep (Pint-Sized Poem #30)

I really enjoyed the rhythm in the beginning and repetition of it in the end and the drastic rhythm change in the third verse. It could be a symbol of the abstract to the concrete. The abstract has a obvious flow to it though it's essence is not quite defined and gritty. The concrete is that physical representation of the idea of "earn your keep" and I could feel it. Then, the poem ends with the abstract ideas and the rhythm, the thesis that you want us to remember. I like this-- very much so.

Thank you for the comment and I'm glad you liked the poem. But I'm not exactly sure how to explain the poem considering that it's erotic, thus meaning it's an extremely personal kind of poem for me. Seeing as I do not like talking about stuff like that outside of my few erotic poems.

- Paige Rider

Oh, yes, it sounds that you and I share experience in how personally we hold our poems concerning our sexual ambitions. I am used to leaving mine unexpressive except with a select few. People tend to see all different sides of my behavior except for my sexual behavior and often I wonder that if I discussed these certain things with them that they would think it out of my character (and they hold me to a high character). That is why I stay anonymous and still get to find escape in some erotic poetry.  Yet, because of this all, it's sometimes hard to tell if my poems are erotic or not. But they are part of a personal exploration. I guess that for me, I leave it up to others what the poetry would place in levels of eroticism. I would rate your poem well. A poem does not have to lose its sweetness and elegancy and be rough and raw to be erotic. This is a softer, lovelier erotica. It is lighter-toned and smooth flowing like something that would sound happy and free within one's sexual experience. Dark sensations do not have to be realized though there are many erotic poets that try to be heavy. The bright and classical approach to erotica can be just as fulfilling as you have exhibited, and as I try to show in tons of my own erotic poems.

Thank you, I'm glad someone understands. Erotic poetry isn't just about sex to me, it's about love and romance. Sometimes when I read certain things entitled erotic, I don't feel love in the words because there probably is none. My ex-girlfriend use to write really detailed erotic poetry about things her and I never did, and it made me feel awkward and filthy, even though we had never done any of those things. My poems all come from my emotions, whether they are thoughts, stories, memories or actual things I expierenced I write everything from the heart, as I feel in the moment I am writing it. So when it came to erotic poetry, I wanted to capture how I felt when it came to the physical side of love and romance, which is what I think erotica should be.

I mean, it's such a pretty word why make it into something ugly?

- Paige Rider

very true :)