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If I drink it, will you go?
Shut up, shut up, I'm not listening.
Sixty times around now, and still
not what I want to hear. Enough
with the three am visits.
Yeah, there's a reason I stopped
picking up. Stop trying to trick
me with a false trail of breadcrumbs.
Your words still taste of acid
and your reasoning would tempt
a philosopher to the hemlock.
I think — you know what?
I'm done thinking. I'm better off
drinking this amnesiac brew
then punching through a few days
until you forget my address.
Rewind/erase never looked so good.
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Re: If I drink it, will you go?
8th Feb 2014 6:58pm
Sounds like a tonic that would bring you relief
from an apparent bad case of the relationship blues
I wish you a speedy recovery my friend :)
from an apparent bad case of the relationship blues
I wish you a speedy recovery my friend :)
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
9th Feb 2014 7:09am
I have left it open to be interpreted in a number of ways... Poetik, romantic soul that you are, I'm not surprised you saw it as such!
Thank you for the kind wishes, but not all my poems are auto-biographical, and rarely about guy trouble, lol. However, I'll take it as a sign that I succeeded in a flexible write.
:)
Thank you for the kind wishes, but not all my poems are auto-biographical, and rarely about guy trouble, lol. However, I'll take it as a sign that I succeeded in a flexible write.
:)
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
8th Feb 2014 7:35pm
For some people, this is the point they work towards, and they have a long string of these events to prove their point. One more pearl on a long string of pearls.
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
9th Feb 2014 7:10am
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
Anonymous
9th Feb 2014 9:07am
Can be read as a "setting limits" poem, enough is enough, kind of thing.....well worded, as always!
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
9th Feb 2014 3:21pm
Well, thank the poetry gods for Mourganna's excellent perceptions! Yeah, I think your analysis works well.
Thanks for stopping by.
:)
Thanks for stopping by.
:)
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
9th Feb 2014 4:10pm
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9th Feb 2014 4:54pm
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
9th Feb 2014 6:10pm
My first reaction was someone covering their ears to the continuous babbling in their own head…but then again maybe not….liked this very much! :)
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
11th Feb 2014 6:34am
Maybe so, Jeje! Your perspective is valid, of course. Thank you so much for the comments.
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
Anonymous
10th Feb 2014 4:52pm
youse doll babee....drink up darleeng! rM
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
11th Feb 2014 6:35am
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
11th Feb 2014 9:39am
yes, I see your point: battle w/the voice in your head, fighting an unbeatable foe. & the reference to Socrates' final cocktail...
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
12th Feb 2014 8:55am
Glad you caught that reference, Feddeler... A touch of drama felt apt!
Thank you for reading...
Thank you for reading...
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
Anonymous
12th Feb 2014 7:34am
Hemlock is too bitter from what I've read....vodka has a nicer burn...
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
12th Feb 2014 8:56am
Well yeah, but the point is vodka won't kill you...
Thank you, Mike, appreciate the thoughts!
Thank you, Mike, appreciate the thoughts!
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
What's the go with 3am???? Has everybody synchronised their body clocks?
I always like it when your get pissed and pissed off, it makes for edgy poetry. Your voice is like ouzo with attitude, slapping every eager wiener on the way to the bar... did I go to far? Rewind/erase!!!
Awesome write, Atakti!
I always like it when your get pissed and pissed off, it makes for edgy poetry. Your voice is like ouzo with attitude, slapping every eager wiener on the way to the bar... did I go to far? Rewind/erase!!!
Awesome write, Atakti!
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re: Re: If I drink it, will you go?
14th Feb 2014 9:04pm
Attitude I got, with an extra order of pissed off... Have I scared readers off yet?
Thanks, Case, man, appreciate the feedback, 3am or otherwise lol.
Thanks, Case, man, appreciate the feedback, 3am or otherwise lol.
Re: If I drink it, will you go?
14th Feb 2014 10:45am
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14th Feb 2014 9:05pm