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The Monster You Created
I'm succumbing to the sickness you manifested
Our love... my love, was a scab and you picked at it.
It left bloody kisses on my cheek
And a copper taste on my tongue
I'm nothing more than the smoke that swims from your lips
The simple fucking rhythm that beats in your chest
I held your heart in my frost bitten hands
And cried my fear into its shallow home
To look you in the eyes would mean death
But I can't remember the last time I saw your face
I do remember the soothing texture of your eyes
Meet my gaze and suck the life from me
I need you to kill me
The monster you created
Our love... my love, was a scab and you picked at it.
It left bloody kisses on my cheek
And a copper taste on my tongue
I'm nothing more than the smoke that swims from your lips
The simple fucking rhythm that beats in your chest
I held your heart in my frost bitten hands
And cried my fear into its shallow home
To look you in the eyes would mean death
But I can't remember the last time I saw your face
I do remember the soothing texture of your eyes
Meet my gaze and suck the life from me
I need you to kill me
The monster you created
Published 3rd Feb 2014
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3rd Feb 2014 6:32pm
3rd Feb 2014 6:44pm
3rd Feb 2014 7:12pm
This is beautiful. Even better than that it taps into something I feel deeply at the moment. Thank you for sharing this.
3rd Feb 2014 7:50pm
3rd Feb 2014 11:19pm
Oh, wow. It reminds me of the tragedy of Frankenstein.
Betrayal and ignorance, how the Monster that Dr. Frank created held all his worst traits, but also his best, which I argue would be his innocence versus his intense rage.
Like how love can be the "life you create," (the Monster) but "the monster," (betrayal, miscommunication) your good intentions become, which sort of ruin the whole thing.
You might not have actually alluded to Frankenstein at all buuut I like it.
Betrayal and ignorance, how the Monster that Dr. Frank created held all his worst traits, but also his best, which I argue would be his innocence versus his intense rage.
Like how love can be the "life you create," (the Monster) but "the monster," (betrayal, miscommunication) your good intentions become, which sort of ruin the whole thing.
You might not have actually alluded to Frankenstein at all buuut I like it.
4th Feb 2014 6:41pm
I'm glad you like it, wasn't really alluding to Frankenstein, but I can see the connection.
