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erotically yours
erotically yours
erotic friends
making amends
so grateful
you all
bear the heat
erotically
to help you
behave poetically
thanks to you
do I really deduce
the juices my joy stick
does produce
and
your insides induce
but try not to
me seduce
erotic friends
making amends
so grateful
you all
bear the heat
erotically
to help you
behave poetically
thanks to you
do I really deduce
the juices my joy stick
does produce
and
your insides induce
but try not to
me seduce
Published 3rd Feb 2014
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3rd Feb 2014 3:30am
Hmm, this is a poem of clever rhymes. I might say, though, that the word 'produce' is over-used... it's repetition doesn't appear to accomplish anything.
Am I picking up an ironic tone in this poem? That makes it all the more fun (:
Am I picking up an ironic tone in this poem? That makes it all the more fun (:
3rd Feb 2014 3:41pm
at times we all over orgasm
but ur intention
has been well taken
be not mistaken
the production
has been slackened
but ur intention
has been well taken
be not mistaken
the production
has been slackened
22nd Feb 2014 5:14am
Oh, I happened to discover that I could see the replies to my comments, and I'm so happy that I did! I love the re-write, and I'm glad my comment was not taken to be harsh.
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Anonymous
12th Feb 2014 1:42am
Wow! Sounds like someone has touched your soul. Very nice tribute. :)
12th Feb 2014 11:25am
my soul
if u say i have one
is ever floating
touching every one
thanks for being
so touched
if u say i have one
is ever floating
touching every one
thanks for being
so touched
25th Feb 2014 3:31pm
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14th May 2014 8:28am
at times we all over orgasm
but ur intention
has been well taken
be not mistaken
the production
has been slackened
Wise ones
always follow
the WISER ones
You r such a one
thanks gain
my soul
if u say i have one
is ever floating
touching every one
thanks for being
so touched
touch me all over feel me as you wish try and fish if you do wish!
but ur intention
has been well taken
be not mistaken
the production
has been slackened
Wise ones
always follow
the WISER ones
You r such a one
thanks gain
my soul
if u say i have one
is ever floating
touching every one
thanks for being
so touched
touch me all over feel me as you wish try and fish if you do wish!
4th Aug 2014 4:01pm
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at times we all over orgasm
but your intention
has been well taken
be not mistaken
the over sperm production
has been slackened
now it sees a gross reduction
may be many times none
O wise cuummings ones
always follow
deep into the hollow
the WISER longer ones
You are such a
strong hard on one
one time's again
thanks again
hoping to resume spermocummming ere
the pole itself does wear
and
foreskin does tear
my soul
if u say i have one
is ever floating
touching every one
thanks for being
so touched
touch me all over feel me as you wish try and fish if you do wish!
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including more than half mine
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at times we all over orgasm
but your intention
has been well taken
be not mistaken
the over sperm production
has been slackened
now it sees a gross reduction
may be many times none
O wise cuummings ones
always follow
deep into the hollow
the WISER longer ones
You are such a
strong hard on one
one time's again
thanks again
hoping to resume spermocummming ere
the pole itself does wear
and
foreskin does tear
my soul
if u say i have one
is ever floating
touching every one
thanks for being
so touched
touch me all over feel me as you wish try and fish if you do wish!
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