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love
Your eyes are so so seductive
drawing me into your tantalizingly tender arms.
As we hug, I kiss your ears and neck
with an enormous amount of love and respect.
You are prefect …
And you make me happy
as high as a hippie
on some really really good weed.
And now, I have the munchies for your love
admitting my feelings without realizing
how natural loving you really is.
With you, I can’t help but initiating intimacy regularly
[/b][/i]as you enlarge my heart with love. [/b][/i]
drawing me into your tantalizingly tender arms.
As we hug, I kiss your ears and neck
with an enormous amount of love and respect.
You are prefect …
And you make me happy
as high as a hippie
on some really really good weed.
And now, I have the munchies for your love
admitting my feelings without realizing
how natural loving you really is.
With you, I can’t help but initiating intimacy regularly
[/b][/i]as you enlarge my heart with love. [/b][/i]
Published 13th Feb 2011
| Edited 4th Mar 2011
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13th Feb 2011 11:28pm
...it'd be cool, this little ditty, if YOU DIDN'T SHOUT, and if you spelt correctly, and didn't ruin good words like 'perfect' by putting the word 'pretty' in front of them to reduce the effect, and you used the word 'realising' instead of releasing...and the cock joke at the end takes it from a riff on true love to a 'let's fuck' come down...apart from that you nailed it...
14th Feb 2011 3:56am
