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Shattered Pictures
The history
of the misery
of love
can
take
a
memory,
pound it...
insufferably
with massive
madness
like fists
meant
to
muddle
it
so
much so
in a
sparsely
mutated
n' densely
multilated
blind mist...
that
uncovering
a
past
scent
of perfumed
happiness
can
presist
to be
a mystery
if any
bliss
truly did
exist
Like an oasis
desperate to inhabit
or was it
simply deserted
by a ravaged soul
as the ache hurt
so bad
that the view
was just...
no longer crisp?
of the misery
of love
can
take
a
memory,
pound it...
insufferably
with massive
madness
like fists
meant
to
muddle
it
so
much so
in a
sparsely
mutated
n' densely
multilated
blind mist...
that
uncovering
a
past
scent
of perfumed
happiness
can
presist
to be
a mystery
if any
bliss
truly did
exist
Like an oasis
desperate to inhabit
or was it
simply deserted
by a ravaged soul
as the ache hurt
so bad
that the view
was just...
no longer crisp?
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Re: Shattered Pictures
8th Jan 2014 4:53pm
I'm feeling the shattered perception. You lay it out raw. Its emotions are deeply evident :)
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9th Jan 2014 5:52am
Thank you my dear, just trying to learn how to
deliver with the power you write with :)
Thank u so much, appreciate you always :)
deliver with the power you write with :)
Thank u so much, appreciate you always :)
Re: Shattered Pictures
8th Jan 2014 8:49pm
...such a sad picture of love's pain! A beautiful piece you've created with a pen that aches from despair! Well done hon...Xo
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9th Jan 2014 5:54am
Rain how many times can I say what you mean to me
where it doesn't sound bland? I'm just wondering becuz honestly thank you doesn't seem sufficient enough...
Appreciate you always :)
where it doesn't sound bland? I'm just wondering becuz honestly thank you doesn't seem sufficient enough...
Appreciate you always :)
Re: Shattered Pictures
Anonymous
8th Jan 2014 10:24pm
Shattered does the heart and soul become when a luv has gone away. One luves more than the other. I can relate to this. Don't understand why they can't luv back. Wonder why you put so much of you into them. Sorry.....this touched a nerve. LOL!!!!!! :)
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re: Re: Shattered Pictures
9th Jan 2014 5:57am
Aaaawww sweetie I'm sorry it dug at some pain in you
but I do thank you for your thoughts n your continued support always :)
but I do thank you for your thoughts n your continued support always :)
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Anonymous
9th Jan 2014 1:41am
Gotta echo Rain brother Poe, a beautifully scribed testament to the crushing despair of love gone wrong.
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9th Jan 2014 6:01am
Re: Shattered Pictures
9th Jan 2014 4:37am
this was a phenomenal portrait of pain
"that the view
was just...
no longer crisp?" excellent ending it instantly made me envision a picture of a couple in a frame lying on the floor with the glass all shattered into a million piercing shards!!!
"that the view
was just...
no longer crisp?" excellent ending it instantly made me envision a picture of a couple in a frame lying on the floor with the glass all shattered into a million piercing shards!!!
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re: Re: Shattered Pictures
9th Jan 2014 6:06am
Thank you my sweetie! I'm happy you found this
worthy of your time n thoughts, as always I appreciate you endlessly :)
worthy of your time n thoughts, as always I appreciate you endlessly :)
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9th Jan 2014 5:31am
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10th Jan 2014 5:49am
Thanks bro. Guess it I should apologize, but I guess you're ok with it Regardless true? lol appreciate u always :)
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Your chose your lines wisely, putting so much emphasis on all the 'write' parts. (shout out to the stanza 2 alliteration!)
I agree with the many above me: powerful raw digging and shattering of the heart
I agree with the many above me: powerful raw digging and shattering of the heart
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10th Jan 2014 5:51am
My talented friend I truly thank you, n I'm grateful as always
for your time n thoughts :)
for your time n thoughts :)
Re: Shattered Pictures
11th Jan 2014 2:55am
A sad, haunted feeling this raises in me Mr P. Well penned brother. A connected read. Thank you.
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re: Re: Shattered Pictures
11th Jan 2014 2:14pm
Thanks bro. Sorry bout the darkness but hey every now n then gotta go there when that's where the muse wants to go! lol
Appreciate you always dude :)
Appreciate you always dude :)
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11th Jan 2014 11:57am
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11th Jan 2014 2:17pm
Mami! hi my sweetness, good to hear from you again! Thank you n yea I know it does but as I told npik, sometimes
that darn muse wants to go there, n I must
do as she wants! lol grateful always to you for your support :)
that darn muse wants to go there, n I must
do as she wants! lol grateful always to you for your support :)
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12th Jan 2014 1:11am
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12th Jan 2014 9:04am
Absolutely brilliant. sharp- blunt and yet urging you to continue digesting...bittersweet love
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12th Jan 2014 12:56pm
Sweet lady, I'm deeply flattered by your commentary!
Truly appreciate your time n thoughts on my ink :)
Glad you liked! :)
Truly appreciate your time n thoughts on my ink :)
Glad you liked! :)