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Hypnagogia
My first glimpse of morning
into a "threshold consciousness"
caught between the scenes of reality and dreams
its in this moment
desolation lapses
into silence
in this moment
murmurs of a broken heart
flitter into mute
in this moment
I plead not for death to
reunite us
in this moment
I'm at peace
without you...
Then I Blink
Published 3rd Jan 2014
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3rd Jan 2014 4:42pm
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10th Jan 2014 00:01am
Under the bridge between reality & dream is where I try to dwell. The Romantic within can barely co-exist with the outer Realist. Some of us may never know balance. These are the surreal moments that I can barely remember yet cannot easily forget. Glad to see you finally post something. This is a truly affecting piece & I hope there is more to come.
19th Jan 2014 6:49am
16th Jan 2014 7:12am
easily lends itself to cryptic interpretation! My favorite parts:
" in this moment
I plead not for death to
reunite us"
" in this moment
I plead not for death to
reunite us"
19th Jan 2014 6:52am
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- Edited 16th Jan 2014 8:32pm
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19th Jan 2014 6:53am
19th Jan 2014 3:34am
Hey,
ok, one poem, hell of a write though. Be nice to read a bit more from your mind and experience.
I see nothing wrong with the content, or the words chosen, I think you could utilise your refrain a little better by putting
"in this moment" on its own line throughout, mere nit pics though and all in a great offering but sad there are no more to read.
great stuff, shine on
ok, one poem, hell of a write though. Be nice to read a bit more from your mind and experience.
I see nothing wrong with the content, or the words chosen, I think you could utilise your refrain a little better by putting
"in this moment" on its own line throughout, mere nit pics though and all in a great offering but sad there are no more to read.
great stuff, shine on
19th Jan 2014 7:46pm
there is peace in loss, it is just finding it by shifting where your eyes lay
nice writing, i enjoyed it thoroughly
nice writing, i enjoyed it thoroughly
20th Jan 2014 7:38am
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Anonymous
19th Feb 2014 2:24am
What a great story. Enjoyed this beautiful write very much. :)
19th Feb 2014 6:14pm
A delicate poem on a delicate state. Wonderful lines, Ali-cat. The last line's mind-blowing.
12th Apr 2014 4:59am
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13th Apr 2014 9:03pm
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Anonymous
23rd May 2014 10:00pm
This is a well written poen in my opinion, Ali-cat.
10th Jun 2014 8:49pm
Anonymous
11th Jul 2014 4:50am
I think this is a great poem, I like the strength it exudes yet at the same time it is still subdued and vulnerable, nice job.
12th Aug 2014 7:27am
How does someone write something so beautiful and only have one poem? Must have been an amazing moment of inspiration! JJ
Anonymous
31st Oct 2014 2:42pm
This is beautiful and elegant.. Very well written.. Pure brilliance.. Nicely done.. Love it.. You're very talented...
Dave
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