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I miss you.
You ask why im mad.
I reply with the horrendous facts.
I am not mad, none the less i am upset.
Devistated.
I miss you.
Not you. but the figure of you.
The invisible entity that describes,
our disadvantages.
The arguments.
The fights, sadly, beginning to fade.
The days of emotion.
You were there, you cared.
For the pain in which we underwent together.
[font=Verdana]You ask why im mad.
I reply with the horrendous facts.
" I am not mad, none the less hurt."
Spirituality.
The looks that would guide me through the worst.
The advice that Advised me to keep going.
"Never give up."
Though the contradiction remains.
Just a fragment of imagination.
We have given up the factor of life we value the most.
Irresistable. Honorable.
Confusing. Neverending.
Friendship.
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I reply with the horrendous facts.
I am not mad, none the less i am upset.
Devistated.
I miss you.
Not you. but the figure of you.
The invisible entity that describes,
our disadvantages.
The arguments.
The fights, sadly, beginning to fade.
The days of emotion.
You were there, you cared.
For the pain in which we underwent together.
[font=Verdana]You ask why im mad.
I reply with the horrendous facts.
" I am not mad, none the less hurt."
Spirituality.
The looks that would guide me through the worst.
The advice that Advised me to keep going.
"Never give up."
Though the contradiction remains.
Just a fragment of imagination.
We have given up the factor of life we value the most.
Irresistable. Honorable.
Confusing. Neverending.
Friendship.
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Published 9th Feb 2011
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9th Feb 2011 1:18am
9th Feb 2011 1:24am
Anonymous
9th Feb 2011 1:22am
*Devastated
*Invisible
*Arguments
*Beginning
*Contradiction
*Honorable
Love this [:
and you're pretty amazing too..
*Invisible
*Arguments
*Beginning
*Contradiction
*Honorable
Love this [:
and you're pretty amazing too..
9th Feb 2011 1:24am
9th Feb 2011 1:32am
....this is a shadow of a poem. Tell the reader why you are upset...without that it is just greeting-card lines...we get no reason to feel any empathy, no reason to feel anything...
Re-write it, and put yourself into the work...
Re-write it, and put yourself into the work...
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