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Elastic clocks mock the memories
I think I have of you - half history
but half wishing what probably was
nearly truth. Sometimes I want
to shake the apricot tree, to hear
the soft bump of fruits on earth.
I climb the mountain that knows
our home, on solid rock... The horizon
has swallowed the ships you touched.
Our bench in the park is scarred
with names, tears, plans. It grimaces
at my hurried steps, faltering past.
Our hands are months apart,
in the same places. I need a slice
of time, if only for a second.
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23rd Dec 2013 11:12am
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23rd Dec 2013 3:15pm
Time really n e v e r does wait for anyone.....
And all of the seemingly endless 'somedays' of our futures vanish before our dreams(plans)have ever been realized.
(Carpe diem...appreciate, and live in each, and every moment!)
A powerfully poignant piece!
And all of the seemingly endless 'somedays' of our futures vanish before our dreams(plans)have ever been realized.
(Carpe diem...appreciate, and live in each, and every moment!)
A powerfully poignant piece!
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23rd Dec 2013 11:36pm
Ah, Dark Encantress, you always bring a nugget of wisdom with you...
Thank you for reading!
Thank you for reading!
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23rd Dec 2013 4:38pm
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23rd Dec 2013 5:08pm
This is a lot like something I could've inked! Love this me friend, outstanding from start to finish! :)
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Anonymous
24th Dec 2013 3:46am
I read something fairly recently ... that those we love are never gone ... just displaced in time... they are still present in our past... this brings that very much to mind...
I love the way you write, girl...
I love the way you write, girl...
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24th Dec 2013 6:17am
You're on it, Kitten, finger on the fluttering pulse...
Thank you for the love!
:)
Thank you for the love!
:)
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Anonymous
24th Dec 2013 9:47am
Great subtle lines, the slightest of things can mean so much. Keep on crafting, Atakti!
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27th Dec 2013 11:53am
I read this a dozen times at least. And just stared off into nothing. Skipping from place to place. Each thought in its own time for I don't know how long until I came back. I believe that is the purpose of poetry Ms Atakti. Thank you for the poem, and the drift Miss. Lovely.
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28th Dec 2013 8:41pm
Oh wow, that is a great honor you have given to my words, Twitch, that you would spend time and meandering thoughts on my ink... Thank you.
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14th Jan 2014 1:01am
This is almost enough to bring a tear to my eye.
Our bench in the park is scarred with names, tears, plans.
The whole poem is lovely in the same way as hearing someone playing the old gypsy on violin, but that stanza was absolutely beautiful. It's been a while since I've seen you write something this direct, and I've gotta say I've missed this style of yours. (Shame on you, you made me sound all seeryus for a sec!)
I like this melon you picked up :)
Our bench in the park is scarred with names, tears, plans.
The whole poem is lovely in the same way as hearing someone playing the old gypsy on violin, but that stanza was absolutely beautiful. It's been a while since I've seen you write something this direct, and I've gotta say I've missed this style of yours. (Shame on you, you made me sound all seeryus for a sec!)
I like this melon you picked up :)
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14th Jan 2014 4:24pm
Aww, Dys, thank you.
How strange, that you spot a difference in my writing... it's all the same to me until you say that, makes me think...
Yes, how about this pineapple? Two-for-one offer!
How strange, that you spot a difference in my writing... it's all the same to me until you say that, makes me think...
Yes, how about this pineapple? Two-for-one offer!
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18th Jan 2014 6:27pm
Beautiful, powerful, and everything in between! I can relate in many ways, I love it!!
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