Matryoshka [souls]

Brilliant conceptually and in execution

Thank you, whale. By this stage of the comp the words weren't flowing easy. A bit of thought and a lot of work went into this one, so I'm stoked with your feedback.

I have always admired your work - but this is brilliant even for you. Bravo, and hail, Antarctica...

Petit Minou, I'm humbled by your feedback... you bloody made me dig deep on this one. I knew you wanted to kick ass!!

Thanks heaps for the great rivalry, it was a lot of fun.

Stunning work. Keep pushing, Case, see where you end up (pun unintended).

You reached deep for this one, and delivered (I did it again...) something that's left me awestruck.

The love of the craft is under your skin now, Poet.

You had me grinning, because I could visualise Atakti grunt-chuckling writing this pearler... but strip back the puns, you've really touched me with your comments.

If I had a hero in DU, it would be Tank Girl, her support means a lot me. ;)

Alexander, I must say that your last few poems have been a follow up of your skillful writing!
This piece is a tuned in tale, which takes time for the reader to sink in.
Due to the subtle slow build up one can experience a tiny part of the process.
The emotions, the strong bond that one feels when a parent is about to leave life, is about to die. And strangely you DO think of things you never realized you knew, almost asif indeed you can remember your time in the womb of the mother. The womb is where the blueprint of life starts...

I looked up the word "Matryoshka" and this I got

..."The little lady with a big secret”. The Matryoshka is a little lady that hides a powerful secret. Embracing the feminine form"

The feminine spirituality is also part of this poem, as it has so many themes.

Writing is always a good way to communicate.
And in this process, I wish you strength

LIZQ, your comments sent shivers down my spine, its beautiful.

This poem is all about the perfect design and ultimate strength of a woman, so I am so stoked you deciphered this from my masculine words, my eyes, the male perspective.

The symbolism behind Matryoshka in my poem is that a woman is the vessel for eternal life. She is creator and from love eternity will spawn, life within life.... feminine spirituality. :)

Thank you for putting so much thought into this poem and for finding the little lady with the powerful secret.

All I can say brotha is start spreading your gospel ...

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I'll be posting more info like this ... You in as much as any need to start looking for larger platforms ...

LSP

Thanks for your great compliment, brotha LSP. I'll keep an eye out on your posts.

I'm not quite where I want to be with my writing, but once I make my poetic century, I'll be confident to then spread the gospel.

stunning representation of the birth process. your delivery room is ethereal...

John, it is always an honour to have you drop by and comment on my work. Thank you so much for you awesome comment.

I can't say more than the other commentators, and probably not with so beautiful words! I like very much your work, this is really one of your best one! And I see again in my thought, through your words, what I lived for the birth of my daughters!
Thank you so much, Alexander, for this text.

Malin, out of all the comments, yours has touched me the most. We have both shared   in that humbling experience, witnessing our own flesh and blood being brought into this world.
 
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and I'm really stoked this poem made it to your reading list.

With nesting dolls it starts with the outer-layer and the design normally is of an elder will weathered woman and as the dolls get smaller, they become more and more youthful, to the last doll which becomes an infant.

I had my first set when i was about 6yrs old (my nona brought form russia) and i was fascinated by the painted details.. as i became fascinated reading the intricate details you carved in this poem, the imagery from outer-layer to the last stanza, the birth of your child.

The theme was captured so perfectly, in that one second your creation linked past and future generations and I must say that you truly took your reader there with you, we felt every emotion experienced through your eyes bleeding thru your ink.
This probably is the most heartfelt and personal poem I have ever read and it was an honor to be part of something so personal. Thank you!

I think I even remember watching a Matryoshka doll mysteriously separate and then reassemble on Sesame Street [random flashback].
 
"Creation linked past and future generations..." that's exactly what this poem's about. Souls inside a soul, inside a soul... there is no heaven and hell, just eternal life.
 
When your child is born you feel euphoric. I remember driving home from the hospital listening to Led Zeppelin cranked up on the stereo, speeding thru backstreets on my way home, whilst screaming out the window. I was buzzing. When I got home I emailed my family photos and rambled some lines that formed part of the last stanza.... never delete old emails or messages, it's like a treasure hoard for poets and writers.
 
I'm sorry I haven't replied to your awesome comment sooner. It was actually cool coming back and rereading this poem... did I write that?
 
Thank you so much for your constant support, Nikki.