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Missing You
Loving you is easy; missing you not so much. I long to hear your voice and feel your touch.
When I don't feel you near as time goes by, my face may show a smile but all my heart can do is cry.
They say distance makes the heart grow fonder. Distance for me is like a storm full of thunder.
I wonder if you are simply asleep; are you well or is there reason to weep.
Missing you is hard to bare. I long for your kiss; to share the same air.
My body misses you deep within; I'm only complete when we are skin to skin.
To be close enough to smell your cologne; to touch your body and hear you moan.
Even when I miss you I know you are there; that you love me and deeply care.
Missing you makes my days longer. Missing you makes my love stronger.
I miss you because I love you and you alone. I guess I will miss you until we call the same house, home.
When I don't feel you near as time goes by, my face may show a smile but all my heart can do is cry.
They say distance makes the heart grow fonder. Distance for me is like a storm full of thunder.
I wonder if you are simply asleep; are you well or is there reason to weep.
Missing you is hard to bare. I long for your kiss; to share the same air.
My body misses you deep within; I'm only complete when we are skin to skin.
To be close enough to smell your cologne; to touch your body and hear you moan.
Even when I miss you I know you are there; that you love me and deeply care.
Missing you makes my days longer. Missing you makes my love stronger.
I miss you because I love you and you alone. I guess I will miss you until we call the same house, home.
Published 16th Dec 2013
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16th Dec 2013 4:18pm
I am missing someone too who i am still deeply in love with. Pain writes beautiful poetry, though, like this .
16th Dec 2013 4:25pm
Missing someone you love so much is hard. But emotions make for good writes. Thank you for the feedback
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16th Dec 2013 4:41pm
Wow, I could visually see when you write. You paint a great picture with your words!
16th Dec 2013 4:43pm
16th Dec 2013 5:21pm
This almost has the feel of a format poem. Did you follow a format when you wrote? If not, I would play with line break a bit to make it a bit quicker to read and digest. It helps to draw the reader in a bit more and makes a re-read more probably for people like me. Also, I might reconsider the repetitious rhyming as I feel it draws away from the subject for me, distracts me from the full substance of the poem.
It's a very relate-able subject and you did a great job with it!
It's a very relate-able subject and you did a great job with it!
16th Dec 2013 6:25pm
Thanks for the feedback. I rarely use a format or even research poetry forms. I just write whatever I'm feeling at the moment
A very yearning write. Favourite lines make an erotic climax to the poem:
My body misses you deep within; I'm only complete when we are skin to skin.
To be close enough to smell your cologne; to touch your body and hear you moan.
Even when I miss you I know you are there; that you love me and deeply care.
Missing you makes my days longer. Missing you makes my love stronger.
My body misses you deep within; I'm only complete when we are skin to skin.
To be close enough to smell your cologne; to touch your body and hear you moan.
Even when I miss you I know you are there; that you love me and deeply care.
Missing you makes my days longer. Missing you makes my love stronger.
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