Tightrope - Senryu

I would think his
smile would be broad
enough to safely
walk across..:)

I was thinking more of those
tight-lipped smiles, you know,
which throw us off balance ...
I love your insightfulness :-)!

that's a precarious image, Chi, maybe what Culture Club had in mind when they sang 'I'll tumble for ya'...

Tight smiles ARE precarious in more than one way. They keep their distance, show disapproval, they even hurt. A tight smile as well as a tightrope are always precarious things.
Thank you, dear John, for sharing your thoughts!

Nice lil piece sweets


Sir Lancelott

Thank you, Lance, for reading me! I very much appreciate you comments!

Yes, as such it can be, without a safety net, one might hit rock bottom....intriguing write, Chi!

Exactly. At one moment you feel safe and at the other you're ass kicked. Or just simply bounce off the tightrope smile ...
Glad you like it, Liz, your thoughts and comments are always appreciated and very welcome!

Ur short pieces are easily among the best I've read, this one
is no exception to that fact! :)

*blush*. I thank you from the bottom of my heart, Poe. I'm grateful for your lovely feedback! Trying to put a whole story into only 17 syllables is an adventure :-)and I'm  really thrilled when it seems to work! Thank you, dear!

I love this!! Beware that tightrope smile...who knows which way those lips will fall open....

Exactly! And if you happen to be on the wrong side ... not good! Thank you so much, JeJe :-D!

inner balance attained...
no more safety nets...

That sounds GOOD!
The inner balance is necessary
when crossing tightropes :-).

beautiful wriitng

Speaks the Poet! And Miss Chi curtsies :-). Thank you!

I like the concept of a smile being like a tightrope

A smile can span a gap
between lovers like a bridge
and as a thightrope  
a smile can widen a gap
between lovers,  
making the crossing a dangerous adventure.
The concept is ambiguous and I thank you very
much for your thoughtful comment, Sara!

Three lines leading to elation or a fall to the depths. A lingering anticipation. Thank you again Miss Chi. Lovely.

I'm very glad that you like it and that you got the underlying thought! Thanks for your nice comment and for stopping by!

I really love this, it is amazing how much you are saying here with so few words. such an abundance of feeling elegantly expressed!

I'm deeply humbled by your kind words, sensorydecay! It is a challenge to pack those burning and dense emotions into a 5-7-5 senryu. I love to create them and I love it when I reach my fellow poets with them. Thank you so much for reading me!