Numb

this poem is full of pain.. that I can relate to all too well I didn't say earlier but i'm on benzos as well and I mix them with alcohol daily but the numbness only lasts so long.. deep heartfelt write Sir.. much love Crim

It's good to know someone can relate. As for your comment, I am truly honored someone such as yourself would take the time to read my work. Through reading you, I have learned alot about imagery and flow in a short period of time. Noticed you deleted your latest entry, I too have that problem, deleting submissions if I feel attacked in some way. It was truly beautiful work, it inspired me to write this. Anyway, im rambling again. Thanks again, Crim

thank you Sir for such heartfelt words I really appreciated what you said on that poem and it was good to know i'm not alone I deleted it out of fear of being to vulnerable but then decided to repost it from memory.. thank you for touching my heart with such kind words.. you are an artist with a beautiful soul.. much love Crim

Thank you, Crim. And really it's no problem at all. And "beautiful soul"? I'm truly touched. I anxiously await your next write.


Honored,
Sir

Emotional, heartfelt honesty, great write Colten :)

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. :)

That's pretty deep. Just reading it makes me feel sad.

That's kinda what I was going for, here. Glad you enjoyed it, man.

Finding an seeking that numbing escape even if temporary is so relatable, another painfully expressed write, SirCreepy. Well done :)

Thanks, angel. I guess you could say depression crept up on me this morning, along with some cravings. Really appreciate the comment.

quite a nice write creepy... very gloomy and dark material there ...
I can relate to it..sitting back alone and just smoking and going on with shots fades me to a beautiful place ... the third one is the stanza that most of us might hate ...coming back to reality .. but that's the truth u can hide but can't run ...

coming to the write and the way u have constructed it..I'd say
it is very catchy .. the first stanza very much to the point then the smoke thing getting really dizzy, kinda really interesting is that u haven't mentioned ur sorrow , which is not necessary anyways...the third and the fourth one is also   very well written ..but the last stanza i think wasn't necessary coz when u had ended the fourth line of the fourth stanza with
'molding me into a bitter man'
I thought that itself spoke a lot of your mystical torments and had filled the bucket.. ahh the last one I think was just 'trying' to add a more explanation to your hard time, which I guess was done pretty well in the above stanzas..

but its just my stupid opinion. ... creepy id suggest u to stick with whatever  u think looks good..

write on..


cyanide...

Thanks, Cyanide. Honored you would take the time not only to read it, but to analyze and break it down, even offering some feedback with your critique.


Take it easy,
Sir

blue jolly rancher at the bottom of a 16 oz sprite. 2 bars a new tattoo and a freestyle you won't remember till somebody shows you 2m..........

go ahead and get right dawg...........

Haha, indeed.

like it

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it

Mine too, sadly. Thanks for stopping by, glad you enjoyed it.



Much love,
Sir