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when friend let friends.......
close to the door
she paused to stand
as he took his class ring
off her hand
all who were watching
would not speak
as a silent tear
ran down his cheek
and through his mind
the memories ran
of the moment they walked
and ran in the sand
hand in hand
but now her eyes were so terribly cold
for he would never again
have her to hold
they watched in silence
as he bent near
and he whispered the sweet words
"i love you" in her ear
as he put on his ring and wanted to die
and just then the wind began to blow
as they lowered her casket
into the soft deep snow.....
this is what happens
to men alive.....
when friends let friends
drink and drive
she paused to stand
as he took his class ring
off her hand
all who were watching
would not speak
as a silent tear
ran down his cheek
and through his mind
the memories ran
of the moment they walked
and ran in the sand
hand in hand
but now her eyes were so terribly cold
for he would never again
have her to hold
they watched in silence
as he bent near
and he whispered the sweet words
"i love you" in her ear
as he put on his ring and wanted to die
and just then the wind began to blow
as they lowered her casket
into the soft deep snow.....
this is what happens
to men alive.....
when friends let friends
drink and drive
Published 28th Jan 2011
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Anonymous
28th Jan 2011 3:56am
how did she pause to stand if she's in a casket?
or did she metaphorically stand? how is that possible?
or did she metaphorically stand? how is that possible?
Anonymous
28th Jan 2011 3:57am
ohh.. and how was it close to the door? if they're outside.. burying the body... ? unless they're burying the body indoors.. which would be a tad unusual .
28th Jan 2011 4:04am
28th Jan 2011 8:31am
i read it whilst listening to feels like home by edwina hayes and i was in a really saddeing atmosphere when i read it which made it all the more powerful. its sad and heartfelt and i still understand it despite the comments from noh8. i didnt even dwell on those things till she pointed them out .
keep it up yeah :)
keep it up yeah :)
29th Jan 2011 4:50pm
this is amazing :) it really makes me think and i feel like it has a very good message behind it.
