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Pardon Me
Pardon Me
the devil stole my prayers
I his accomplice
I used my hands as a mask
as I knelt before God so he wouldn't recognize me
told Him what I wanted to hear
as the fertile seeds grew quicker weaving the trellis of my mind
each panicle an escapee for the larceny of my convictions
freedom has no key
nor cell
and I am satisfied cresting the gallows
the devil stole my prayers
I his accomplice
I used my hands as a mask
as I knelt before God so he wouldn't recognize me
told Him what I wanted to hear
as the fertile seeds grew quicker weaving the trellis of my mind
each panicle an escapee for the larceny of my convictions
freedom has no key
nor cell
and I am satisfied cresting the gallows
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Re: Pardon Me
15th Nov 2013 6:25am
Re: Pardon Me
15th Nov 2013 9:07am
intricate writing. in a prison of your own making, shamelessly tryin to fool the Judge...
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Re: Pardon Me
Anonymous
15th Nov 2013 1:37pm
Great imagery--love it! Nice job!
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Re: Pardon Me
Anonymous
15th Nov 2013 3:14pm
LSP,
Love this one! We all live in our own cell, just a matter of how we decorate it ; ) Loved your line:
"I used my hands as a mask"
Enjoyed!!!
tornado
Love this one! We all live in our own cell, just a matter of how we decorate it ; ) Loved your line:
"I used my hands as a mask"
Enjoyed!!!
tornado
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Re: Pardon Me
Anonymous
15th Nov 2013 3:32pm
Brilliant LSP! your own hangman, ritual ablutions completed in the river of deceit..
just brilliant
just brilliant
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Re: Pardon Me
15th Nov 2013 5:27pm
Oh I love these types of writes! Those that provoke thought, make you wonder and study yourself, if it were you in the ink. Wonderfully inked my friend...Xo
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Re: Pardon Me
15th Nov 2013 6:30pm
"told Him what I wanted to hear"
Therein lie the lies...
Cleverly crafted write.q
Therein lie the lies...
Cleverly crafted write.q
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Re: Pardon Me
Anonymous
16th Nov 2013 1:31am
The more I read, the more I want to read...
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Re: Pardon Me
17th Nov 2013 4:09am
I think all that sparring with haiku has assisted you with honing your short poems. Powerful lines from start to finish, my favourites...
"as the fertile seeds grew quicker weaving the trellis of my mind"
"and I am satisfied cresting the gallows"
This is a poignant piece and a fine example of your craft.
"as the fertile seeds grew quicker weaving the trellis of my mind"
"and I am satisfied cresting the gallows"
This is a poignant piece and a fine example of your craft.
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