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👑 How To Be A Princess 👸
Be kind,
be respectful.
Show the world,
your beautiful smile.
Rich like Jasmine,
or poor like Cinderella.
Beautiful girls,
are generous and loyal.
Pass a smile
to gain a smile.
Respect yourself,
and everyone else.
Then, you will see.
Kindness,
Is what makes you wonderful.
And the world will see,
what a beautiful princess you've became.
~~ Just wrote. Please let me know what you think!
All my poems are copyright of 2012 and 2013. No part of my poems are to be copied without my permission. Thank you!
be respectful.
Show the world,
your beautiful smile.
Rich like Jasmine,
or poor like Cinderella.
Beautiful girls,
are generous and loyal.
Pass a smile
to gain a smile.
Respect yourself,
and everyone else.
Then, you will see.
Kindness,
Is what makes you wonderful.
And the world will see,
what a beautiful princess you've became.
~~ Just wrote. Please let me know what you think!
All my poems are copyright of 2012 and 2013. No part of my poems are to be copied without my permission. Thank you!
Published 13th Nov 2013
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13th Nov 2013 7:57pm
its very sweet n innocent.. but too girly for me to dig the concept ..
but these lines are good
' Pass a smile
to gain a smile.
Respect yourself,
and everyone else.
Then, you will see.'
however structure wise u need to work on a bit of rhythm.. u have used some nice metaphors , try to expand it
for example: the above line that I pointed out could have been followed up with a stanza with the same rhyme scheme on the first four lines and then a line that would end with something that would rhyme with 'see'.. just rhyming is not enough keep it real n appealing..!
keep writing .
cyanide...
but these lines are good
' Pass a smile
to gain a smile.
Respect yourself,
and everyone else.
Then, you will see.'
however structure wise u need to work on a bit of rhythm.. u have used some nice metaphors , try to expand it
for example: the above line that I pointed out could have been followed up with a stanza with the same rhyme scheme on the first four lines and then a line that would end with something that would rhyme with 'see'.. just rhyming is not enough keep it real n appealing..!
keep writing .
cyanide...
13th Nov 2013 8:25pm
Haha! Yeah it is girly. I'd be scared if a guy found the "How To Be A Princess" topic interesting :D
But thank you so much for reading and for your comment. I greatly appreciate it!
I will keep that in mind and work to improve it more. Thanks again!
But thank you so much for reading and for your comment. I greatly appreciate it!
I will keep that in mind and work to improve it more. Thanks again!
1st Jul 2014 9:23pm
It is sweet and innocent but you're writing from the heart so that makes it genuine. Enjoyed.
1st Jul 2014 11:19pm
