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Men in Uniform
Tall men smartly turned out
ooze authority
their gaze demands respect
but when you offer
strong liquor to a dog
you can never tell
if they'll bite
or roll belly up to be petted
So when the cop
motioned me to pull over
miles out of town
on the lonely desert highway
I wondered if my tail lights
were the problem
or was there something else
impressed more urgently
on his mind
I'd already set my fingers to work
as he began the slow walk over
from his patrol car
handcuffs jangling on his belt
swinging boldly
to the flash of the red and blue light
My eyes picked out the hardness
of complex muscles on his torso
rippling through the uniform
competing for my attention
with the bulge between his thighs
I wondered how it would feel
all spread out
draped across the Buick's soft gray leather
the two of us reclining naked
peeled like plums
juicy and enticing
massaging each other's cocks
until we juddered and shuddered
separate routes to ecstasy
a single destination
But there was no bump
and no grind
he only warned me
sternly about those lights
then watched as I drove off
disappointed and still horny
stiffer than hell on a hot night
Published 25th Jan 2011
| Edited 14th Jul 2012
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25th Jan 2011 9:37am
men in uniform aren't my usual type, but your collections of thoughts: you're like a fountain of understanding. effortless, as always.
I wasn't sure from your comment that S5 had worked, Jes.
I had to skimp on that description as I have no personal experience to draw on there.
So with that aspect in mind, I'm obliged to consider this as a somewhat inferior write.
I had to skimp on that description as I have no personal experience to draw on there.
So with that aspect in mind, I'm obliged to consider this as a somewhat inferior write.
yes, i got that it was a man's fantasy! but gay men and women sometimes have the same taste in men! and i think similar fantasies are common in both genders, being that gay men are exposed to a lot of female fantasies through whatever venues that cater to women at a younger age. i thought you did very well, of course, i'd get a gay man's view on the mutual cock massaging part of the fantasy...but the whole thing just came out naturally. you did well for a straight guy. [:
25th Jan 2011 10:05am
Sexuality is a minefield for the writer ain't it.
Maybe I'll ask Jack for advice on this.
I am having a real struggle at the mo, trying to decide how women refer to their private anatomy after someone suggested to me that they would seldom use the word 'pussy'.
25th Jan 2011 10:58am
Yep, I phoned a gay friend to ask advice.
Jack won't be up for hours and I want to move on without this nagging at me.
Have now reworked S5 plus some other tweaks.
Hope I haven't overdone the subliminals.
i like everything you've changed except "routes to ecstasy"... after the first version it felt a tiny bit forced, but that might just be me.
25th Jan 2011 11:07am
Perhaps the play on 'roots' is too forced - I'll leave it settle a while longer. Thanks for your help.
26th Jan 2011 11:16am
I'm convinced with this Abra, just stop over thinking it, detail doesn't really matter sometimes, the way you narrate it rocks-- twisty! I enjoyed this piece(...it's just a bit funny coming from you, can't help giggling!)
26th Jan 2011 1:39pm
