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Love
The arrogance of affection
boasting and scattering tidings
as if there is nothing else important
in the world left to admire;
That is love.
An affliction of desperation and slavery,
manipulative and overbearing in the wrong hands
yet its mesmerizing lull woos hearts tougher than stone.
To some, a weakness
to others, a strength
a responsibility, for all
meant to refrain thought and will.
Hypocrites thrive here as well
confessing and digressing at the drop of a hat
love lies at home while lust ploughs the fields
emotions aren't real, just an excuse for conversation
disagreements are blisters only dissolution can heal.
Honest love is hard to find
everlasting love is rarer than Astatine
but please don't misconstrue, I'm not so shrewd
I too have loved, just like you.
boasting and scattering tidings
as if there is nothing else important
in the world left to admire;
That is love.
An affliction of desperation and slavery,
manipulative and overbearing in the wrong hands
yet its mesmerizing lull woos hearts tougher than stone.
To some, a weakness
to others, a strength
a responsibility, for all
meant to refrain thought and will.
Hypocrites thrive here as well
confessing and digressing at the drop of a hat
love lies at home while lust ploughs the fields
emotions aren't real, just an excuse for conversation
disagreements are blisters only dissolution can heal.
Honest love is hard to find
everlasting love is rarer than Astatine
but please don't misconstrue, I'm not so shrewd
I too have loved, just like you.
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Re: Love
5th Nov 2013 4:22pm
...hopefully again someday said the half full (fool) glass-excellent Pen!!!
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Re: Love
5th Nov 2013 4:24pm
Sounds like a lot of resistance from the narrator to an irrepressible force...
Love is a headache and a salve, and its the change between the two that breeds ink.
I had to Google Astatine... ;) yep.
Love is a headache and a salve, and its the change between the two that breeds ink.
I had to Google Astatine... ;) yep.
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re: Re: Love
5th Nov 2013 7:46pm
:o you caught on you sly minx...
and so did I, haha... we're on different ends of the same cruise liner ;)
and so did I, haha... we're on different ends of the same cruise liner ;)
Re: Love
5th Nov 2013 4:25pm
"emotions aren't real, just an excuse for conversation"
^^^^^^^^^^^Awesome!!!!!!
great write 13 :)
^^^^^^^^^^^Awesome!!!!!!
great write 13 :)
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re: Re: Love
5th Nov 2013 7:47pm
well this was an observation.
i can't say anymore... it'll cost me. lol
thank you nikki!
i can't say anymore... it'll cost me. lol
thank you nikki!
Re: Love
Anonymous
5th Nov 2013 4:49pm
Wooo! Dennis you could have put that 5th line at the end of each stanza and let it stand alone..perfect!! I'm awed by this ink..and i'm really feeling it. Thanks for this most excellent ink Bro :)
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re: Re: Love
haha thank you for your flattering comment and list.
that line would have... but you know how i crap on this thing they call 'form' :P
that line would have... but you know how i crap on this thing they call 'form' :P
Re: Love
5th Nov 2013 5:41pm
Ooowee....you're kinda' sexy when your pen sound smart! ;) Love it, love it, love it.....Xo
Pen Hug~
Pen Hug~
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re: Re: Love
5th Nov 2013 7:53pm
thank you rain! *hugs back*
oh this wasn't smart... this was desperation at an hospital laughing at stale jokes of an almost dead man. lol
oh this wasn't smart... this was desperation at an hospital laughing at stale jokes of an almost dead man. lol
Re: Love
6th Nov 2013 4:50am
Honest love is hard to find
everlasting love is rarer than Astatine : True that !
Loved your love poem love !! Beautifully crafted :)
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Re: Love
Anonymous
6th Nov 2013 5:27am
Loving this write... too often true. And when the real thing comes along, it's hard to know if it is...
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Re: Love
the darker dimensions of this strange thing called love covers its own radiance..you have kept in the blackness to flow well in momentum..until you speak about honest & everlasting...the deep yearning just overpowers all ur darkness like the single sun, it wins ..& wins more when you confess finally:| loved the way you put it in the last two liners.
somehow, the first four stanzas, as you keep on generalizing with darkness, vusualizes more like a documentary, the last stanza wins you the trophy man as you personalize:)
somehow, the first four stanzas, as you keep on generalizing with darkness, vusualizes more like a documentary, the last stanza wins you the trophy man as you personalize:)
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re: Re: Love
12th Nov 2013 11:47am
Re: Love
Anonymous
6th Nov 2013 2:46pm
Like an earlier comment you left on one of my poems, I also sense some conflict of the self here. On the one hand, this is in the love category - I believe it attempts to convey the physical sense of love. We then read through and get the emotional sense, the ideological sense, the personal sense. That's what makes this piece so interesting.
The highlight here for me is :
"To some, a weakness
to others, a strength
a responsibility, for all
meant to refrain thought and will."
Says so much in just four lines.
This is a really fascinating thought process. Thank you for the read.
The highlight here for me is :
"To some, a weakness
to others, a strength
a responsibility, for all
meant to refrain thought and will."
Says so much in just four lines.
This is a really fascinating thought process. Thank you for the read.
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re: Re: Love
12th Nov 2013 11:51am
yeah well you're right... that's what sparked the thought of the poem.
i've tried to keep it flowing through without losing enthusiasm. but then im not poet to make such calculated decisions in writing. when im writing im not even thinking just pinning one word after another until im out of words lol
thank you and you're welcome.
i've tried to keep it flowing through without losing enthusiasm. but then im not poet to make such calculated decisions in writing. when im writing im not even thinking just pinning one word after another until im out of words lol
thank you and you're welcome.