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'Wash'
Her soft sticky pussy lips
Gently brush the face of me
As I pry her sweet wet lips apart
starin' into her hole to see
How I love, how my baby
oozes her sweet honey,
open mouth gobbles all she gives,
preciously
she's lovin' my lappin'
as she moans in esctasy
it makes me so insane
I wanna set my baby free...
squirt for me my love,
squirt me buckets
n' drench my greedy mouth
I have travelled all over her
hot, delectable, body
yet, always go back down south
Mmmmmm.... Yea that's where home is at
n' goddamn it baby...it's where you stamped
in my mind the very last place you sat...
Gently brush the face of me
As I pry her sweet wet lips apart
starin' into her hole to see
How I love, how my baby
oozes her sweet honey,
open mouth gobbles all she gives,
preciously
she's lovin' my lappin'
as she moans in esctasy
it makes me so insane
I wanna set my baby free...
squirt for me my love,
squirt me buckets
n' drench my greedy mouth
I have travelled all over her
hot, delectable, body
yet, always go back down south
Mmmmmm.... Yea that's where home is at
n' goddamn it baby...it's where you stamped
in my mind the very last place you sat...
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Re: 'Wash'
1st Nov 2013 5:34pm
very delightful.. the first two lines are very well written poetik.
so were these,
'squirt for me my love,
squirt me buckets
n' drench my greedy mouth'
its very beautifully written totally but try to use 'and' for 'n'..
gives a very casual approach ...
write on my boy..
cyanide..
so were these,
'squirt for me my love,
squirt me buckets
n' drench my greedy mouth'
its very beautifully written totally but try to use 'and' for 'n'..
gives a very casual approach ...
write on my boy..
cyanide..
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re: Re: 'Wash'
1st Nov 2013 5:54pm
Aaawww thank your friend, but I assure you the "n"
is intentional, it's not my always, it's my sometimes lol
I'm completely aware of when and why I ink how I do... I'm a 'poetry rule breaker' lol but I truly appreciate your thoughts n support :)
is intentional, it's not my always, it's my sometimes lol
I'm completely aware of when and why I ink how I do... I'm a 'poetry rule breaker' lol but I truly appreciate your thoughts n support :)
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1st Nov 2013 7:00pm
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1st Nov 2013 7:16pm
Oh yea kid I have done quite a few times but as I said, only
when i feel like it :)
when i feel like it :)
Re: 'Wash'
1st Nov 2013 6:39pm
It is an erotic but also very sweet read. A lovely combination of words painting such delectable imagery..... yummy!
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re: Re: 'Wash'
1st Nov 2013 6:47pm
Aaaawwww u touched with ur sweetness! Thank you so much lady, I'm so grateful for your thoughts :)
Re: 'Wash'
1st Nov 2013 6:53pm
Oowee.....somebody gonna' get busy on this freaky Friday night! Dang mannn..... You went in HARD with this one...;) Enjoyed! Xo
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re: Re: 'Wash'
2nd Nov 2013 11:42pm
Lmao...yea I bet YOU surely did after your super nova ink u wrote, but me? I had to work fri., today n tomorrow
so yea... Busy lol. Thanks a ton my dear one :)
so yea... Busy lol. Thanks a ton my dear one :)
Re: 'Wash'
2nd Nov 2013 2:36pm
"I have travelled all over her
hot, delectable, body
yet, always go back down south"
Whew!! that was hot,Hot,Hot!!! Fabulous wordplay!! Well Done Sir :) enjoyed
hot, delectable, body
yet, always go back down south"
Whew!! that was hot,Hot,Hot!!! Fabulous wordplay!! Well Done Sir :) enjoyed
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re: Re: 'Wash'
2nd Nov 2013 11:44pm
Well you know hott if anybody knows it, so I gotta give you big thanks for the props n smile n appreciate u always my sweetness :)
Re: 'Wash'
3rd Nov 2013 11:28am
Erotica, steamy hot erotica laid down freaky style. Wash, love the title and your ink defined it to perfection. Two thumbs up!
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re: Re: 'Wash'
3rd Nov 2013 12:00pm
Thanks bro. Funny enough I was thinking of
titling it "Dirty Face" but then I thought
hey the 'act' is dirty, so why not 'clean' it?
Lmao that thus wash was born lol
Truly appreciate you kid :)
titling it "Dirty Face" but then I thought
hey the 'act' is dirty, so why not 'clean' it?
Lmao that thus wash was born lol
Truly appreciate you kid :)
Re: 'Wash'
Anonymous
3rd Nov 2013 2:32pm
Southern comfort, or southern hospitality? or both? lol
I just love how things are mapped sometimes, hot one PIKM, again and again :))
I just love how things are mapped sometimes, hot one PIKM, again and again :))
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re: Re: 'Wash'
3rd Nov 2013 3:01pm
Definitely both! Especially with you lol
But yea, sorry I got a lil heated lol thank u sweetness
for your always being there for me, it's truly appreciated :)
But yea, sorry I got a lil heated lol thank u sweetness
for your always being there for me, it's truly appreciated :)
re: Re: 'Wash'
5th Nov 2013 2:15pm
aaaawwww thank you! N wow u winked! Now I'm blushing lol
Appreciate you much :)
Appreciate you much :)
re: Re: 'Wash'
15th Nov 2013 7:06am
Hey sweetie! aaawww thank you ! glad you liked this spillage...
Truly n always appreciate your support :)
Truly n always appreciate your support :)