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If I could just...
If I could just...
find the words to tell her
so, yet the fear won't let me dare
Still I fight hard to face it
so she will know
just how much I care
If I knew the ways to win her
would it result in her
wanting, to always be near?
If she could feel my heart
bleeding...pleading out
in wholly sigh
Would that lead to her sharing
a 'space inside' for her, and I?
If she could sense this passion
that burns forever deep
will she know it intrinsically
she's The Dream as I fitfully sleep?
If I only had a moment,
just a fraction in this space
of time
I would hope she'd want
and accept my loving her
intimately...
body, soul, and
mind...
find the words to tell her
so, yet the fear won't let me dare
Still I fight hard to face it
so she will know
just how much I care
If I knew the ways to win her
would it result in her
wanting, to always be near?
If she could feel my heart
bleeding...pleading out
in wholly sigh
Would that lead to her sharing
a 'space inside' for her, and I?
If she could sense this passion
that burns forever deep
will she know it intrinsically
she's The Dream as I fitfully sleep?
If I only had a moment,
just a fraction in this space
of time
I would hope she'd want
and accept my loving her
intimately...
body, soul, and
mind...
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Re: If I could just...
Anonymous
28th Oct 2013 3:25pm
beautiful...you should tell her
really enjoyed this melancholic read
bravo!
really enjoyed this melancholic read
bravo!
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28th Oct 2013 4:16pm
Sadly, no one to tell but my fantasy lol
Still I thank you my sweet dear lady muah! Ur rock! :)
Still I thank you my sweet dear lady muah! Ur rock! :)
Re: If I could just...
28th Oct 2013 3:56pm
well expressed feelings my friend .. I can relate to this..
I been through that for real.. thanks for posting it...
well done..
cyanide.
I been through that for real.. thanks for posting it...
well done..
cyanide.
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28th Oct 2013 4:17pm
Yea, trust n believe I understand where u coming from bro.
Thank you so much, truly appreciate your support always :)
Thank you so much, truly appreciate your support always :)
Re: If I could just...
28th Oct 2013 5:39pm
Wishful thinking?! Wishes do come true....at least that's what I heard! :)
This is by far one of your more emotional scribes, Rich. You painted a beautiful picture of a mere fantasy. Gorgeous! Love this... Xo
This is by far one of your more emotional scribes, Rich. You painted a beautiful picture of a mere fantasy. Gorgeous! Love this... Xo
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re: Re: If I could just...
28th Oct 2013 5:53pm
Aaaawww considering how masterfully you 'paint' ur pictures, I must say I'm very humbled n feel deeply honored by ur words thank u my sweetness :)
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28th Oct 2013 6:35pm
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28th Oct 2013 7:12pm
Yea right, I WISH it'd be that easy lol
Thank you though ur more sweet than honey butter on bread baby! lol... Appreciate u truly :)
Thank you though ur more sweet than honey butter on bread baby! lol... Appreciate u truly :)
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28th Oct 2013 10:24pm
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29th Oct 2013 1:11am
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Yea, it's easy for the women to say, tell her!
Though I agree it's a good idea in most cases. It just isn't always black/white is it. Not much in this world is.
Know the feeling's. Enjoyed.
I deleted a double post btw...
Though I agree it's a good idea in most cases. It just isn't always black/white is it. Not much in this world is.
Know the feeling's. Enjoyed.
I deleted a double post btw...
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29th Oct 2013 1:15am
Yup ur correct sir, B&W it most def. Is not... N at the same time
I too agree, telling her is a good move... Except this is really based on wishful thinking of an impossible situation, but in another lifetime... Who knows? lol... Thanks a ton for ur thoughtful comment n time, it's truly appreciated :)
I too agree, telling her is a good move... Except this is really based on wishful thinking of an impossible situation, but in another lifetime... Who knows? lol... Thanks a ton for ur thoughtful comment n time, it's truly appreciated :)
Re: If I could just...
28th Oct 2013 10:55pm
You put it down again my brother. Always a pleasure to read your work. Superb display of great talent.
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29th Oct 2013 1:17am
Thank you my brother in poetry...I feel blessed to have your continued support n sharing of your thoughts always :) peace n love to u n yours :)
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28th Oct 2013 11:16pm
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re: Re: If I could just...
29th Oct 2013 1:18am
Dude I'm just trying to reach that plateau where you roam! :)
Thanks bro. Truly grateful to u always :)
Thanks bro. Truly grateful to u always :)
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Anonymous
29th Oct 2013 1:12am
PIKM, you're wearing your heart on your sleeve in this one, putting it all out there, not easy to do, but you did it beautifully!! Love it!!
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29th Oct 2013 1:19am
And you warm my heart beautifully each n every time! Thank u my sweetie pie :) appreciate u much!
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29th Oct 2013 5:19am
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29th Oct 2013 10:26am
Aaaaaawwwww c'mere! I wanna hug you! lol
Thank you sooooooo much sweetie :)
Thank you sooooooo much sweetie :)
Re: If I could just...
31st Oct 2013 2:48am
I'm not one for holding my tongue when I really want someone but there was a time when this was me. It took me back, I really enjoyed this (:
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31st Oct 2013 3:36am
Aaaawww well trust me, it's not so much about holding my tongue it's more like at a certain moment in time I couldn't get
this person to actually 'see me' n my imagination believing
how it'd be to have her in my life... Still, it's more bout
just being a dreamer than anything lol... Thank u so much for it thoughts n time, I appreciate it greatly :)
this person to actually 'see me' n my imagination believing
how it'd be to have her in my life... Still, it's more bout
just being a dreamer than anything lol... Thank u so much for it thoughts n time, I appreciate it greatly :)