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Small Town Dreams
I want to become a writer.
A parody writer.
I want to make money writing.
Doing what I love to do.
But for now I'm just a 14 year old
Living in a small town.
Dreams are big.
But actully forfilling them is small.
I wish the famous people in Hollywood
Could see.
What It feels like to live in small town.
Feel those dreams so close as they seem.
But for now they're just small town dreams
A parody writer.
I want to make money writing.
Doing what I love to do.
But for now I'm just a 14 year old
Living in a small town.
Dreams are big.
But actully forfilling them is small.
I wish the famous people in Hollywood
Could see.
What It feels like to live in small town.
Feel those dreams so close as they seem.
But for now they're just small town dreams
Published 20th Jan 2011
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20th Jan 2011 7:44pm
just know that its a very thin line between dreams and reality. a dream can easily become a reality because reality is just a dream
R.O.S
R.O.S
20th Jan 2011 8:27pm
...but I don't think you've given it enough time to ripen so that we can enjoy the taste of maximum sweetness, Bailee.
If you are truly crazy enough to want to write for a living you can never afford to neglect the basics. Ideas are two for a nickel, ideas presented accurately in an interesting way can (after a lot of pain & exceptional luck)be converted into bucks
Have a look at line 8 and rewrite it properly - correct the grammar in your last line & promise yourself that any work you post here is always your best.
Don't be discouraged if I sound harsh, it's because I can see potential in your writing that I say what I do.
Best ~ Abra
If you are truly crazy enough to want to write for a living you can never afford to neglect the basics. Ideas are two for a nickel, ideas presented accurately in an interesting way can (after a lot of pain & exceptional luck)be converted into bucks
Have a look at line 8 and rewrite it properly - correct the grammar in your last line & promise yourself that any work you post here is always your best.
Don't be discouraged if I sound harsh, it's because I can see potential in your writing that I say what I do.
Best ~ Abra
20th Jan 2011 8:50pm
Well, not much to say, and I hate dropping in age, but for 14, you write good. Keep it up. Keep reading, and sneak a beer in evey now and again for good measure!
20th Jan 2011 10:18pm
