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Yours
It needs no pins
to make a butterfly stay.
Rub off the dust of its wings
and it can’t go astray.
It will be with you forever -
but never ever
be yours.
to make a butterfly stay.
Rub off the dust of its wings
and it can’t go astray.
It will be with you forever -
but never ever
be yours.
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Re: Yours
27th Oct 2013 8:09pm
Miss Chi that was a Great little write sweets!!!
Pen On!!!
Sir Lancelott
Pen On!!!
Sir Lancelott
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27th Oct 2013 8:11pm
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27th Oct 2013 8:38pm
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27th Oct 2013 9:32pm
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27th Oct 2013 10:02pm
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28th Oct 2013 11:46am
You're so right, Gabriel.
When we love someone
we shouldleave enough space
for the needs of our partners
and never tether them.
Thanks for your insightful comment!
When we love someone
we shouldleave enough space
for the needs of our partners
and never tether them.
Thanks for your insightful comment!
Re: Yours
27th Oct 2013 11:16pm
a good and simple truth
takes to the wing...your
poem, as always, flies
beautifully..:)
takes to the wing...your
poem, as always, flies
beautifully..:)
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28th Oct 2013 11:48am
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28th Oct 2013 2:50am
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28th Oct 2013 11:50am
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28th Oct 2013 3:37am
I can't imagine taking off if I'm free to fly... Short but deep
meaning-full ink my dear :)
meaning-full ink my dear :)
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28th Oct 2013 1:43pm
That's the point.
Being free
youwon't have
the urge to flee.
Thank you, my dear Poe!
Being free
youwon't have
the urge to flee.
Thank you, my dear Poe!
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28th Oct 2013 1:43pm
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28th Oct 2013 1:47pm
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28th Oct 2013 6:19pm
When you've enough
space to breathe
you'd rather stay
than leave ...
Nice to meet soulmates on that :-).
space to breathe
you'd rather stay
than leave ...
Nice to meet soulmates on that :-).
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Anonymous
28th Oct 2013 4:07pm
Miss Chi,
Beautifully worded with just the right amount of thought sprinkled in. Enjoyed!
tornado
Beautifully worded with just the right amount of thought sprinkled in. Enjoyed!
tornado
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28th Oct 2013 6:21pm
Thank you for your
sweet comment, tornado!
You found kind words which
in turn I enjoyed :-).
sweet comment, tornado!
You found kind words which
in turn I enjoyed :-).
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Anonymous
29th Oct 2013 2:03am
If you love them set them free...
Sad and beautiful and most definitely extremely thoughtful poetry. Ms. Chi you found the heart of the matter in its most delicate form.
Sad and beautiful and most definitely extremely thoughtful poetry. Ms. Chi you found the heart of the matter in its most delicate form.
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29th Oct 2013 8:28pm
Some only want to chain
you because they
are so insecure themselves
and do not trust anyone.
Instead of winning
they only lose.
Thank you, dear Vee, for your so
very insightful and amiable words!
you because they
are so insecure themselves
and do not trust anyone.
Instead of winning
they only lose.
Thank you, dear Vee, for your so
very insightful and amiable words!
Re: Yours
29th Oct 2013 2:45am
Chi, your poem has a soft impact, like a woman's embrace. beauty, like sunshine, can't be imprisoned...
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29th Oct 2013 8:13pm
Lovely words, John, are your
trademark :-). Thank you.
Beauty needs space,
no bars ...
trademark :-). Thank you.
Beauty needs space,
no bars ...
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29th Oct 2013 7:53pm
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29th Oct 2013 8:16pm
You're so right, BS (how shall I call you???),
like John.
Thanks for your kind words.
like John.
Thanks for your kind words.
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29th Oct 2013 8:20pm
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:-). You told me but I didn't
dare call you so in "public".
Was thinking about Butch or Scrapes
but - didn't dare call you so, either :-).
Good to know (you), Ben!
dare call you so in "public".
Was thinking about Butch or Scrapes
but - didn't dare call you so, either :-).
Good to know (you), Ben!
Re: Yours
31st Oct 2013 11:36pm
a lot of truth and insight
in this little poem, writ large
across the page, really enjoyed...
in this little poem, writ large
across the page, really enjoyed...
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1st Nov 2013 12:04pm
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1st Nov 2013 5:13pm
So kind of you, JeJe!
Thank you!
I think I'm not good
at longer poems and therefore
a short one might
definitely be better :-).
Thank you!
I think I'm not good
at longer poems and therefore
a short one might
definitely be better :-).
Re: Yours
5th Jan 2014 1:01pm
Ms Chi this is beautiful. So much in those lines for me. I'll read this many more times. Of this you can be sure. Thank you Ms C. xo
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5th Jan 2014 1:45pm
Twitch, I'm honored that you like it and found something in those lines for - I hope - your comfort? Thanks for your warm words and the reading list entry.