Surrender - Senryu

LOVE This!!

As it is about love,
I very much appreaciate your
love for it! Thank you, JeJe!

Thanks for your kind words, Gabriel but
pleasepleaseplease,
explain the hmmm-ing to me :-)!

Ah, okay. I see what you mean. And perhaps it makes more sense to change will-less into willing. Perhaps I'll try that. Let me think about it ... *think*.
 
Thank you so much for your constructive and kind comment!

It's certainly NOT your slow mind, Gabriel, it's just the difficulty in the detail :-). Brains work differently and I'm glad and grateful you put so much effort in it! You could have simply given up and "turned the page" :-).
Thanks for being so constructive and patient with me ...

I surrender to your poetic charms,
some melodies now unknown become
unto themselves in time

I clearly surrender  
not only to YOUR poetic charms  
but also to your  
charms as an insightful and  
superb commentator :-).  
Thank you, J.!

Very nice, interesting write

Thank you, Sara! Glad you like it!

Melody unknown...
and yet you play
a pretty tune..:)

That's a good extension to it!
Thank you, dear Paul!

Liked this sensual though subtle write, Chi,expressing longing and the moment of unity...

The moment of unity
and the -sometimes -
unknown path
to it.
Thank you so much for your
lovely comment, Liz!

you cause me to ponder, Chi. 'melody unknown': so the music of lovemaking must be untitled...

Or just a novel
composition of notes
which have never been
arranged to a
melody before ...
Thank you so much
for pondering, John :-).

and yet we surrender even when melody is unknown cause we believe in it.
We're all in love with love, ty for this beautiful little gem Ms. Chi :)

You're welcome, dear and gifted Vee. Thank you so much! Even if the melody's unknown we instinctively know how dance to it :-).

Awesome write sweets!!!
Straight too the point!!


Sir Lancelott

Thank you so much, Sir, for your kind words! I very much appreciate them!

Miss Chi,

An unknown melody can be so much more fun to explore....especially in duet! Enjoyed!!!

tornado

Veeery insightful!
That's what I meant!
By the way,
I like the duet idea :-).
Thanks, tornado!

Melodious poet..

Nice comment! Thank you.

Wish to read more

There are more ...

reading ur stuff more...

Nice surrender :) Love your haiku !

Sometimes a little surrender
would not be amiss :-).
Glad you like it, Brinda, thank you!

At first "will-less skin" may not make sense - in the circumstances you describe I would think "willing skin" but can make sense if the reader interprets it as lacking will to resist...
A short, sweet, sensuous verse.

Exactly, Solomon, I thought about the lacking will to resist but in the meantime I realized by my reader's reactions that it has an ambiguous and not fully understandable touch. I hope there were second reads, too :-). Your criticism (and from others, too)and thought-provoking impulse is very helpful for me! Thank you so much!