🌾 A Morning Flower 🌾

Ah. Mother Nature. Is anything more beautiful & cruel? I like the symbolism in the tears of dew. Another good nature piece, Dreamer.

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Great write,i like it so much:)

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u have got a very good skill to frame an image into the readers head .. well done on that part ... but I wud like to see u take it a step further by telling a story out of that ... like u told the sorrow of the stem but ask yourself why?? the root of the sorrow...
or compare ur emotions with the flower , use it as a metaphor.. u know what I mean this will give u wider range of topics to talk about.. this not a critic point of view consider it as a friendly opinion... if u can..

but I can't deny the  fact , this piece is beautiful as heaven.. keep Rollin...




cyanide... .
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Thank you so much I appreciate it!

When I wrote this poem, I wasn't really comparing anything with the flower. I saw a flower leaned over with a drop of dew on its petal, and I was just describing what I saw. The dew reminded me of a tear drop so I tried bringing the flower alive a little by describing as if the flower was actually crying. If that makes sense?

Just trying to be creative. :)

the rhythm of this actually does have a note of exhaustion to it--every line relatively short, could be read as someone speaking while catching breath.

it's a good picture you're painting here, too.  one thing of beauty struggling under the weight of another.  it was put together so we could see how beautiful the dew was, and then what it cost at the end.

there might be a more potent effect in that regard if we were not told midway through that it was "gorgeous, yet sad."  but i don't know, a change there might hurt the rhythm of the poem that i'd praised earlier.  

Thank you!