faceless

This material is decent, but it is not written in poetic form (or did you mistakingly place it in the wrong category?) Either way, it's not the best it could be. There are some syntax errors as well as several grammatical errors. Keep working on it though, you'll get there eventually.

Thanks and not sure where to place it other then in a dark category.

I'm talking about style. Clearly this isn't in poetic form, it's more of a prose like style.

Suffering within as well as without
but  no one sees of this there is no doubt.
Bent and broken there all the words left unspoken hiding,lost in this place, I am the girl without a face
if I'm here or if I'm gone you'll never guess you're always wrong
I stand beside you, still unseen
I am forgotten, I am lost, I am the faceless girl forever alone
I fake a smile 'til I'm home  
but even they're only the mask
do they see so why is it I can't just be me ?



if this was a poem, then it should look like this. I didn't edit it for you, but I did fix the obvious grammatical errors I saw. Hope this helps.

Ya my grammar has never been strong point my spelling ither. But I guess it's more a dark free style but there is no category for that or an other category. But thanks

Actually, you can put it in the prose section, but it is your profile and that's fine. Not saying that it bothers me, but just giving you a fair warning there will be people on here that will give you shit over your grammar and such. Don't pay them any attention but just giving you that heads up that it will happen so you might want to prepare yourself if you can't handle it. The people on here can be really cold.

Haha you haven't met my family ! I can tell  you now nothing they can type that has not been yelled or thrown at me but thank you foforr the heads up .

I disagree with ur commenter's statement that it's NOT in 'poetic form' it doesn't have to be 'formed' to be poetic
You have decent rhyming throughout n the subject is of a sad nature... If anything learning n using line breaks
Will give it a better aesthetic look. It is good n with more
practice/writing you will your own style n how u wanna present it... Just keep writing :)

Well thank you :)