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Don't Forget To Dance
I see you dancing
up there,all alone
your shades pulled down
a silhouette dancing in the light
without a care tonight
spinning to the music
round and round,
sights and sounds
so inviting.
Do I dare
knock on your door
and ask
"May I have the next dance".
"Please".
up there,all alone
your shades pulled down
a silhouette dancing in the light
without a care tonight
spinning to the music
round and round,
sights and sounds
so inviting.
Do I dare
knock on your door
and ask
"May I have the next dance".
"Please".
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Re: Don't Forget To Dance
Such heart's desire! I truly enjoy the vivid image that this piece creates in the mind's eye--the carefree spirit that one feels in pure enjoyment, uninhibited....seemingly unobserved!
( . . .and, yes , you may...have the next dance!
Would be a pleasure! (GOL!) )
( . . .and, yes , you may...have the next dance!
Would be a pleasure! (GOL!) )
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14th Oct 2013 1:15am
Thank you my dear,glad you enjoyed it...now turn the music up and let's dance :)
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13th Oct 2013 8:08pm
Never forget to dance, hashman, life's melody is too sweet to ignore so knock and ask for a dance.
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13th Oct 2013 8:56pm
I say go for it bro! Hell she's already got your passions sparked so you gotta try it kid! lol very nice imagery in this ink bro.
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13th Oct 2013 9:47pm
There are days when I can dance, & days when I can't...we should never forget to try, at the very least. I love the voyeuristic innocence in this, Hashman. I personally think you should dare to knock on that door & ask for that dance, but maybe that's just me being bold from a distance. Thanks for the sweet read :)
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14th Oct 2013 00:28am
It's a lovely picture...perhaps
she waits for you to knock
and really wants to dance with
you..:)
she waits for you to knock
and really wants to dance with
you..:)
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14th Oct 2013 1:29am
Hmmm...perhaps :) just a little thought in my head...stole the title from one of your great British rock bands...name that band lol :)
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14th Oct 2013 3:47am
Such vulnerability with the last line, would you dare to put your heart on the line?i It can be scary, i feel you..
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14th Oct 2013 2:16pm
Just gorgeous. How could the lady refuse. I doubt she would. Thanks for making me smile warmly. Syn
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