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I like how you alluded to physical weathering in this as a metaphor to depict a guarded heart.

A short but clever write.

Love it!:)

Thank you so much, Kitty! Even a guarded heart is never safe from being challenged.
The short ones (hopefully) prevent me from making too many mistakes! That's why :-)!

It's double layer poem, very clever Ms.Chi, taken the alternate sentences gives a whole different meaning..i'm always in awe how brilliantly you can craft your thoughts.

Vee, I'm truely humbled by your lovely words since I know how brilliantly YOU craft your poems! Thank you, my dear friend!

eroding away
the barrier you
surely will...

it's a great
little poem,
excellant..!

Thank you dearly, dart, master of little but powerful words. I bow to you.

...x :)

A short yet very powerful emotive ink
Although I'm not so sure u need that last line
It feels like an afterthought sort of...
But hey what do I know? I just love good ink!
lol

Well, Poe, I think you know a lot of poetry and I thank you so much for giving my poem an earnest thought. I only wrote down what came into my mind and that's it. I'm thinking about your suggestion, my friend, and I'm really thankful for your honest critique! I had to add the last line, but what do I know when YOU don't? Hey, thanks!

but surely the final
line is the point? It
would be so lessened
without it... It's just
right as it is..:)

In response to dartford's comment-
Try this: "constantly dripping"
Becuz, Well it's not so much that it's not needed, maybe just needing to be rephrased to give it a more steady flow?

Dear Poe, I'm very grateful for your suggestions though I'm not sure if changing the last line to "constantly dripping" might probably alter the sense of what I intended to express? I tried it and am not very happy with it. Perhaps because I'm no native speaker and not aware of all the different possibilities to put my words? I'm brooding about it ...
 
Hahaha! You know what I did? Left out the "the" and put in the "constantly dripping". That's why it sounded so bad!

lol it's ok sweetness, it's your thoughts n work
Mine was just a suggestion lol...luv u :)

Your suggestions are always highly appreciated, Poe! Thanks again, dear!

Definitely liking the the feel of this poem. Just gotta say wow

Such a lovely comment, candencecollapsing! I'm so glad that you like the feel ... That's what we hope to achieve in readers, to reach them. Thank you so much!

sweet, Chi. how many teardrops would it take to pierce that barrier...

Thank you, John, I always appreciate your welcome words. I don't know how many it will take ... But the constant dripping will probably lead to success.

no stainless, platinum or silver takes an edge as keen as words Miss Chi. so no arrow might work but the right words in the right circumstance may well pierce the hard outer shell.
Lovely little piece my dear friend. I love it as is......

Thank you so much, Tom! I'm honored by your kind words! And you're right: Words often might melt the ice or pervade any armors, much more than tears ...

water wearing down stone
may take an eon
but time is patient.
great poem, chi

Time is patient,
but are people?
Waiting eons for a
stony heart to soften?
Thank you so much, J. for your
insightful words!

The image I get is that of a bleeding heart, such aching as it continues to bleed, not broken yet.
Touching poem, Chi!

I was thinking more of a stony heart, a barrier between two people. The one who wants to love and be loved and the other one who will not allow that ... You're right, the one who loves will be left with a bleeding heart.

Excellent.

Thank you very much, S, for your kind words! Oh, word :-).

My heart was like a stone for many years...until finally that drip drip dripping you speak of cut a large groove through it. Things didn't work out, & I bled profusely, but, in the end, I am happy to have felt something again. It is necessary to feel vulnerable on occasion. Wonderfully thought-provoking minimalism, straight from the heart.

And seemingly straight
into your heart.  
I'm glad that
a constant dripping
finally cracked your stony shell.
And I'm also glad that my poem
encouraged you to talk  
about your feelings.  

Thank you very much!
And for your lovely words, too.