deepundergroundpoetry.com
a show
the trouble with liking
a bit of trouble
is that it gets you
into a lot more trouble
as the planet
keeps us all a bit dizzy
and even the sunlight
can bring a darkness with it,
as I smoke
one of those crazy twigs
on sunday here on the
grass in a crowd of electricity
and terror and dogs and
waves of
dying and living and
winning and
not
winning, she might be alive
and she might phone.
Published 28th Sep 2013
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28th Sep 2013 7:36pm
Hi this is encouragingly different. I love finding those who write and think outside of the box. (Horrid that a cliche is needed to prove something or someone entirely uncliched. Syn
28th Sep 2013 9:01pm
Thanks. I don't think there's really any originality in anybody (I may be wrong. It's happened before). I think some manage to cling to something 'original'. Out of choice or, more likely, necessity. These are only my theories, you understand. I could expand, but I'd rather drink. I absolutely do not reject ANY view of your's, or invalidate it in any way. I'm sad tonight BTW. Actually, my poetic voice was there in my first poem 20 years ago. So, yes..??? You're cool anyway, thanks for your time.
28th Sep 2013 11:32pm
Very nice bro...I love the way you wrded this...the first 4 lines were my favorite and were so true...
29th Sep 2013 4:35pm
Thanks, man. Appreciated. Hang loose (but don't ask me what it means, it's just what I tell people).
