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Crazy
The beauty of love magnifies my intensity
To shake this love tree
Watch love petals fall to the ground
A crisp sweet sound,
Oh God I dare not take for granted how lucky I am.
To be blessed to see a vision of heaven
This Ohio Flower is a sight to behold
Strike a pose,
Let the whole world see what I see.
Glamorous she is,
A woman
I said, “A woman”, defined perfectly in every-way.
Body like whoa
Style like look, learn, & adapt
Attitude ferocious, as long as you don’t piss her off.
Actually she is a pussy, “Purr”, as gentle as she can be.
I loved this woman, I described with all my heart
What the hell could have went wrong?
She’s gone,
Love
Pain
Addiction
So alone.
Cocking the shotgun,
“Crazy.”
To shake this love tree
Watch love petals fall to the ground
A crisp sweet sound,
Oh God I dare not take for granted how lucky I am.
To be blessed to see a vision of heaven
This Ohio Flower is a sight to behold
Strike a pose,
Let the whole world see what I see.
Glamorous she is,
A woman
I said, “A woman”, defined perfectly in every-way.
Body like whoa
Style like look, learn, & adapt
Attitude ferocious, as long as you don’t piss her off.
Actually she is a pussy, “Purr”, as gentle as she can be.
I loved this woman, I described with all my heart
What the hell could have went wrong?
She’s gone,
Love
Pain
Addiction
So alone.
Cocking the shotgun,
“Crazy.”
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Re: Crazy
22nd Sep 2013 7:34pm
Wow... Intense write bro. But hey I can relate to the ecstatic joy of such a love n the devastating pain of the loss of it... Just make sure if ur using a gun to ur head, it's ONLY WATERGUN :)
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re: Re: Crazy
23rd Sep 2013 1:52am
Thanks for the comment. This piece is a promo to my upcoming book soon to be released. Read in my archives Suicidal Thoughts to see the concept. Hope you saw the video, as I gave all my poets a shout out.
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23rd Sep 2013 11:15am
Wow, I just saw the video... Couldn't watch when I read the first time becuz I was at work, sneaking on DUP lol
Thanks a ton for the shout out kid, n well done on the video
as well, not to mention good luck on the book!
Thanks a ton for the shout out kid, n well done on the video
as well, not to mention good luck on the book!
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23rd Sep 2013 11:11pm
Thanks for the watch and comments. Your welcome on the shout out for all you guys are terrific. Don't get caught at work on dup for the bosses wouldn't understand. Keep doing your thing my brother appreciate & respect the talent.
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14th Oct 2013 7:34pm
Thanks for the comment and watching of the video my friend. Hope all your days bring you joy, laughter, & peace.
Re: Crazy
23rd Sep 2013 3:11am
Love is Crazy! This is a lovely tribute to love and how it becomes your war of sanity! Thank you for the sweet shout-out! Adore and appreciate you, ElBaby! Xo
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Re: Crazy
23rd Sep 2013 11:16pm
Rain, as I adore & appreciate you as well. Your more than welcome on the shout out as it well deserve. Have many blessed days my friend and again thanks as always.
Re: Crazy
25th Sep 2013 10:59pm
wow, great job! The stuck in my mind line is "Style like look, learn, & adapt".
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re: Re: Crazy
26th Sep 2013 4:43pm
Thanks JZM for your comments many blessing to you my friend. Hope you watched the video as I gave all my poets a shout out. Again thanks.
Re: Crazy
25th Sep 2013 11:37pm
Appreciating your work ElBaby and the vibes you send out to your fellow poets.
Sending positive vibes your way.
S:)
Sending positive vibes your way.
S:)
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re: Re: Crazy
26th Sep 2013 4:46pm
Thank you SweetHaven , and I shall receive your positive vibe and bathe in its appreciation. Have a wonderful day!
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27th Sep 2013 00:20am
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27th Sep 2013 4:39pm
As always I appreciate your kind & thoughtful words and collaboration with you would be great. Again thank you for the read & comment.
Re: Crazy
18th Oct 2013 7:50pm
Tisk tisk tisk... Dangerous thoughts. Love is both a blessing and a curse at times. I love the way this poem ended. It started off so passionately and full of fire and ended off with despair (to the point of suicidal thoughts).
Well-written piece,El (:
Well-written piece,El (:
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18th Oct 2013 11:48pm
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18th Oct 2013 8:03pm
re: Re: Crazy
18th Oct 2013 11:50pm
Well thank you MaZoe for your thoughtful comment and may God be with you always.
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21st Oct 2013 3:28pm
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21st Oct 2013 9:50pm
Re: Crazy
Beauty magnified; forsaken love free, don't worry ElBaby; many more petals in tree. Loved the lines; with your prose I am smitten; any comment inept; your every word a vision. Crazy, I love it, never run from the tide, love is a beast, enjoy the ride.
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Re: Crazy
2nd Dec 2013 2:12am
Love your grateful comments my friend. Thank you so much for being a friend an honest on your critiques.