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tongue in nose
lettuce re-deem ahh...selves
hear the reign falls plane
swimming threw the bodies ajar
that coal-lie-did infinitely
I saw pur-versions in half
and trepid-ey-shun full on intimid-eighting
the spy ying I of the sky oh-were
were all butt mewt
the four-front (g)listens
with REM-nints of Die-generate sea-curs
from A tie-im B 4 the prez-zent
are-rye-wing own lee to lur-urn
that re(a)demption kah-unt be sawt.
hear the reign falls plane
swimming threw the bodies ajar
that coal-lie-did infinitely
I saw pur-versions in half
and trepid-ey-shun full on intimid-eighting
the spy ying I of the sky oh-were
were all butt mewt
the four-front (g)listens
with REM-nints of Die-generate sea-curs
from A tie-im B 4 the prez-zent
are-rye-wing own lee to lur-urn
that re(a)demption kah-unt be sawt.
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Re: tongue in nose
11th Sep 2013 1:09pm
The breaks in your words remind me of a staccato spoken word poem that goes into a slow drawl at at the end. HOw did you choose your title?
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re: Re: tongue in nose
11th Sep 2013 10:34pm
well i didnt choose... i just remembered something...
and it's not really meant to be read so... i've just puzzled what is already pretty clear.
and it's not really meant to be read so... i've just puzzled what is already pretty clear.
Re: tongue in nose
11th Sep 2013 6:17pm
veri fonetik
interesting kahunt there..... if you can recite this with your tongue in your nose i think you should do it and add the video
interesting kahunt there..... if you can recite this with your tongue in your nose i think you should do it and add the video
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re: Re: tongue in nose
11th Sep 2013 10:36pm
da i know, but i'll tell you, i cannot even touch my tongue to my nose.
about this video... i shall try...
about this video... i shall try...
Re: tongue in nose
11th Sep 2013 8:26pm
re: Re: tongue in nose
11th Sep 2013 10:40pm
thanks AT... i will try to get one up after im done with the edits... been editing this all day... lol
Re: tongue in nose
12th Sep 2013 8:54pm
Dennis!!! My brain melted trying to read this! I have no clue what it meant! Stop making me feel dumb!:( lollol....
Missed ya~
Missed ya~
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re: Re: tongue in nose
15th Sep 2013 8:18pm
Re: tongue in nose
I can tell that I'm going to keep coming back to this & keep trying not to get mind-fucked as well as lost in its ambiguity.
Good job.
Good job.
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re: Re: tongue in nose
15th Sep 2013 8:19pm
haha... if i put it simply... then there wouldnt be much in reading it...
thanks WU :)
thanks WU :)