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Like a daisy
She took her time
To thoroughly count the leaves
He loves me He loves me not
He loves me He loves me not
By the time she reached the end
All that was left was his heart
It didn't matter anymore
To thoroughly count the leaves
He loves me He loves me not
He loves me He loves me not
By the time she reached the end
All that was left was his heart
It didn't matter anymore
Published 5th Sep 2013
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- Edited 5th Sep 2013 11:14pm
5th Sep 2013 11:13pm
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5th Sep 2013 11:16pm
Perceptive my friend. Thank you! I apologize for not responding to your other comments. Real life and so on ;-)
5th Sep 2013 11:49pm
6th Sep 2013 00:31am
Anonymous
6th Sep 2013 00:14am
Wow! What a thought provoking write. Still not sure what I think. LOL!!!!! :)
6th Sep 2013 00:33am
6th Sep 2013 1:25am
OH..soo sorrowful!
Indecision...fear of commitment...both can end soo tragically!
Penned With Pain on Parchment
Indecision...fear of commitment...both can end soo tragically!
Penned With Pain on Parchment
Anonymous
6th Sep 2013 2:33am
And a dead daisy...
8th Sep 2013 8:15am
9th Sep 2013 10:42pm
Anonymous
9th Sep 2013 10:48pm
There's something pure and magical about this piece, maybe we associated it with childhood innocence along with purity of love. Well done!
10th Sep 2013 7:28pm
Hi Vee,
How nice to see how you can find your own way in my poem and like it. Welcome to my written world. I'll promise to visit yours
Ink
How nice to see how you can find your own way in my poem and like it. Welcome to my written world. I'll promise to visit yours
Ink
12th Sep 2013 3:16pm
....but isn't that a good thing?! And I promise I haven't been sipping any wine, Chris! o_O
~mulling over this one for a while...Xo
Nice.....
~mulling over this one for a while...Xo
Nice.....
23rd Sep 2013 8:17pm
