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The Fuss
It’s complicated
the decisions he employed
painfully, daily
not one to sit and deliberate
he measures predicaments in bare foot quandary
navigating the boundaries
outside the confines of office grim and associates
weaving the under bore
through a web of peepholes
between chaos and excrement
from a company that dealt it
because they couldn’t give it
he’s had to make some tough decisions, lately
walking with purpose
bound four corners of the block
bouncing off the kerb like some rogue juggernaut
rolling over on impact with swift reflex
diverting his course to port
process repeated
systematically
the same four junctions
painfully, daily…
until he felt the tremor
in that instant the mulling expired
when milk turned sour in his mouth
from the other side of the crossroads
he looked back on the well-worn track, now
cut along the seam
he ponders the fuss
about the undermining of office grim and associates
and the intricacies of a well-executed sinkhole.
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Re: The Fuss
5th Sep 2013 12:45pm
Man, you're not tempting me back to an office environment, at all...
Grim realities packing a punch there, Case. Is S2Line3 meant to be "round four corners"?
Thanks for the read!
Grim realities packing a punch there, Case. Is S2Line3 meant to be "round four corners"?
Thanks for the read!
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re: Re: The Fuss
Yeah, it was a bitch of a day. All you can do is think positive thoughts about sinkholes.
S2Line3 is meant to be bound. I'm thinking, maybe I was pushing too hard, trying to play on words with a double meaning with "bound for" and give a sense of being trapped within a compound. I'll think about it some more. :)
Thanks heaps Atakti.
S2Line3 is meant to be bound. I'm thinking, maybe I was pushing too hard, trying to play on words with a double meaning with "bound for" and give a sense of being trapped within a compound. I'll think about it some more. :)
Thanks heaps Atakti.
Re: The Fuss
5th Sep 2013 8:00pm
decisions he employed ... great phrasing
This is peppered with some real gems on the grind of it all
LSP
This is peppered with some real gems on the grind of it all
LSP
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re: Re: The Fuss
6th Sep 2013 1:10pm
Cheers LSP. I wasn't sure if I wanted to post this poem, but the topic was different and I thought the ending was cool. So, yeah, thanks for reading man. :)
Re: The Fuss
Anonymous
5th Sep 2013 9:07pm
deep case...excellent poem...can definitely relate, been there done that man!
strider
strider
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re: Re: The Fuss
Well, a sinkhole can only be one thing... deep.
Tanks heaps for reading strider.
Tanks heaps for reading strider.
Re: The Fuss
5th Sep 2013 11:34pm
I'm lucky enough to have never succumb to office time.
Definitely a thought provoker and wonderful write Alexander.
Definitely a thought provoker and wonderful write Alexander.
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re: Re: The Fuss
6th Sep 2013 5:44pm
Undermining a company could be applied to any employer. :)
Thank you so much for your kind comments Magdalena
Thank you so much for your kind comments Magdalena
Re: The Fuss
6th Sep 2013 5:06am
re: Re: The Fuss
6th Sep 2013 5:45pm
Thank you so much Glynis for taking the time to read and comment... and for following me. :)
Re: The Fuss
Anonymous
7th Sep 2013 4:13pm
--and then people wonder why some go postal. Excellent writing, it's certainly dark but you've captured it very well.
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re: Re: The Fuss
9th Sep 2013 12:35pm
Thanks Vee for reading my black grindstone poem and thanks for the super comments... sometimes I wish my work didn't consume me.
Re: The Fuss
1st Oct 2013 10:16pm
i actually jus stumbled upon your youtube vid for dark dimension by accidentally hiiting the video icon on my search engine lookin for du which is fanfntastic btw man. i dig the style and delivery well done.
anyway -the fuss
seems to come off with an analytical dark approach but without the need for sympathy.
the language especially reinforces the absence of woe is me which i totally dig. sometimes things jus suck and it's purely fact.
well done man. i feel like i showed up to the party late by just stumbling upon your work.
look forward to more...
anyway -the fuss
seems to come off with an analytical dark approach but without the need for sympathy.
the language especially reinforces the absence of woe is me which i totally dig. sometimes things jus suck and it's purely fact.
well done man. i feel like i showed up to the party late by just stumbling upon your work.
look forward to more...
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re: Re: The Fuss
2nd Oct 2013 2:09pm
Well, I'm absolutely stoked the infamous Johnrot stumbled into me and is now following me.
I really appreciate you taking the time to listen to my spoken word, as well as read and great comments on my poetry.
I really appreciate you taking the time to listen to my spoken word, as well as read and great comments on my poetry.