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Storm in the city
Storm in the city
Lightnings in air
Rain on window
Wind on the roof
I love storm when I sleep with you
Love this weather
You hug me strong
Afraid by the noise
Fear light in night
I love storm for protecting you
When storm goes away
The lightnings weaken
Only sound of the rain
On roof, moister smell
I love you when storm is away
You hug me stronger, warmer
I kiss your silky sweat skin
We make love a long time
To evacuate quietly your fear
I love you so much, my sweetheart
Lightnings in air
Rain on window
Wind on the roof
I love storm when I sleep with you
Love this weather
You hug me strong
Afraid by the noise
Fear light in night
I love storm for protecting you
When storm goes away
The lightnings weaken
Only sound of the rain
On roof, moister smell
I love you when storm is away
You hug me stronger, warmer
I kiss your silky sweat skin
We make love a long time
To evacuate quietly your fear
I love you so much, my sweetheart
Published 28th Aug 2013
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Anonymous
28th Aug 2013 00:17am
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28th Aug 2013 6:24pm
Thank you for your comment, Gabriel. Nice as usual.
Just indications to know if you have felt that :
At the beginning of the poem, I try to make short verses, to feel the fear of the thunderstorm.
And I have tried to increase the length (just a little) to feel the quietness coming back, at the end of the storm...
But they are very tiny modifications in the poem to do that... I don't know if you see that. I am very sensible to the rythme of poems, not only rhymes.
Just indications to know if you have felt that :
At the beginning of the poem, I try to make short verses, to feel the fear of the thunderstorm.
And I have tried to increase the length (just a little) to feel the quietness coming back, at the end of the storm...
But they are very tiny modifications in the poem to do that... I don't know if you see that. I am very sensible to the rythme of poems, not only rhymes.
Anonymous
28th Aug 2013 1:57am
It's the ozone and that electric tingle in the air, not fear. But yeah - thunderstorms are awesome!
28th Aug 2013 6:25pm
Thank you for your comment, funny... I always like your comments, as your poems. Must go to see your lasts!
