Simply put

Raw fuckin honesty,awesome write.

yep evan

The poem could do with a few more images and other poetic techniques, but it's a nicely rhythmic portrait of an idea. Your aggression could help you make great work. JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read.

True honesty at its best, nice write Evan.

These are just a few facets of writing.Although I get what your trying to say.You seem to be the one needing humbling,and perhaps a more open mind...  
 
cheers
 

Seem to be? Either be straight, or don't bother.

Everything isn't black or white son,Only fools deal in absolutes.The word seem gave you benefit of doubt...
 
 
Expendable youth is a good slayer toon..  
 
Having control a principle obsession,rivarly,and retribution,death, the only solution...

While that is true, there's nothing foolish about being straight up honest and not veiling your intent behind vague words, Son.

Ah well, it's my favourite Slayer track, it's relevant to my shit too

But poetry isn't all just about straight up honesty,there are fantasy writings yes?

I think your whole view is vague respectfully..

It's subjective to the individual, write with truth, don't bullshit to the readership, and fantasy writing is something I don't enjoy. I'm an honest writer, I like to show my reader what I feel, what I think and what I see. With restraint.

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You're dead wrong mate. I think you've come here for something damn near like a publicity stunt. You haven't been the first. You clearly have a serious problem with me, and I haven't got a damn clue as to why. I critique, I help writers, I've been here for years, I've contributed to this god damn website and I write what I feel, shitting on writers, or shitting on you? You've come here with your bias and intent. And it won't work for you, sorry champ.

Fake persona? You haven't got a damn clue, yeah maybe 2 years ago, but not now. I'm here, who I am. As I am Whether you can take it or not.

You've taken my poem and made it about you, well done.

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This is some serious bullshit my man. If you consider this harsh critique or in any way cruel or unfair you won't be able to handle the real critique in poetry, that's what I do, it helps, it helps progression. And in the real world, because life isn't suppose to be soft and cuddly. Nor is poetry, you'd rather spare others feelings than improve a piece of poetry, counterproductive.
 
Wrong, I want everybody to be better writers, better poets. And tougher for the real critique, you think I'm an asshole? Try the pigpen poetry site, this is nothing.
 
No tears here, simply observing. You don't like how I do things, tough shit. I'm not going anywhere.

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Shit's fine, and I critique with and without being an asshole, there's times and places, needed and unneeded at times, seriously go to pigpen poetry and step into the serious part of poetry, see for yourself. It's tested, it works, it helped me when I thought the same as you did, that they were being too mean. They weren't, they were doing their jobs. Critiquing, all critique is a gift, I'm here because I care, I've spent years here. And I'm glad I did, still am. Because poetry is worth the time.

In the real world, there are assholes everywhere, that's life, plain and simple. I'd point out your grammar. But it doesn't matter in a comment section.

Evan,I already know...
 
The first thing I ever wrote you,and hemi tore the fuck up,and deservedly so.I did learn from that your right.Even though I'm still not great.I'd like to think my newer stuff has improved atleast somewhat over that.Thanks ok?
 
However,I've seen you guys shit all over people for rhyming.Well you rhyming pain,and fucking gains isn't exactly genius either,I'm afraid to say.Should I shit on it?
 
I've read Yeats,and Lord Byron too.Their rhymes don't tear me shirt off either.You got critiques for them?
 
There's many types of poetry,and your closing off opened mindedness with these views is how I feel.
 
Now,I will delete my prior posts,for the sake of not highjacking your poem.
 
It won't let me delte them >

Rhyming intentionally, rhyming by coincidence. This is the difference you, and others need to learn.

I'm not a genius, never said I was. The shit that I post here isn't worth what you seem to think it's played up to be.

If you wanted critique for your new poetry, you only had to ask.

And fair enough. Do what you like.

I'm not asking for critiques on my poetry man.I don't beat around the bush as much as you appearently think.That's up to you...  
   
   
Ima take the rest of my response to message.I can't seem to delete the others..

P.S. Slayer rulez~

Ahaha, that it does, fuckin slayer my man, aha.

For the record,I did ask Evan to critique my shit 3 days later.

However that's not what this was about.I do not want to keep making points here.I just wanted to be transparent.  
 
 
 
 
 

Yeah, well I'm closing my account and leaving. My advice is sign up to pigpen poetry and post your poetry there. I don't have time for anyone but me now. I have my career to begin.