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He was a dandelion
with the soul of an oak
and I carved my initials into him
forgetting the necessity
of gentleness
with the soul of an oak
and I carved my initials into him
forgetting the necessity
of gentleness
Published 23rd Jul 2013
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23rd Jul 2013 6:02am
Very lovely. This is the first poem I read since the site went back to normal and I am not disappointed. I like the succinctness and abrupt finish. Thanks
27th Jul 2013 4:29am
27th Jul 2013 2:06pm
Agh when did your style change so much? This is lovely and pretty and tender but passionate all at the same time. I bet you could build a home out of your words.
Anonymous
5th Sep 2013 12:14pm
More brilliant words...
The contrast between the dandelion and the oak makes for great imagery, and again you have such a great control over your words and how they effect me. Love it.
The contrast between the dandelion and the oak makes for great imagery, and again you have such a great control over your words and how they effect me. Love it.
5th Sep 2013 9:39pm
29th Sep 2013 5:56am
I'm in love with this one because it's so simple yet it allows you to make this clear image in your head of what you're describing
