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here, as i watch the sunset
the stars falling in rippling waves
the clouds are gliding by in silence
an ever-changing painting in pink and blue
you, standing proud like a statue
smooth marble skin as you hold your head high
i, standing right beside you
looking so hard but i cannot see the lie
here in this infinite perfection
your amber eyes, my heart inflamed
the sweet song of your voice
my heart thrumming i can't hear what you're saying
smiling lips, making and breaking promises
swaying hips, lurid galvanizing exclamations
she turns her head just enough away
i wish to yell "Stop! Look at Me"
the stars falling in rippling waves
the clouds are gliding by in silence
an ever-changing painting in pink and blue
you, standing proud like a statue
smooth marble skin as you hold your head high
i, standing right beside you
looking so hard but i cannot see the lie
here in this infinite perfection
your amber eyes, my heart inflamed
the sweet song of your voice
my heart thrumming i can't hear what you're saying
smiling lips, making and breaking promises
swaying hips, lurid galvanizing exclamations
she turns her head just enough away
i wish to yell "Stop! Look at Me"
Published 11th Jul 2013
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This is another example of your natural talent to write. There are heaps of great lines here, strong description and you show restraint. I can tell you have a connection with the ocean.
Welcome to DU and congrats with your first comp. Your poem Hips was a stand out for me.
See ya around.
Welcome to DU and congrats with your first comp. Your poem Hips was a stand out for me.
See ya around.
