Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
1st Jul 2013 11:23pm
But "apathetic orange squeezer"
doesn't do anything for you?
--Fair enough.
Actually, to somewhat explain this little piece, I meant to have two mildly incompatible, yet slightly compatible ideas together in one phrase--apathy and healthfulness. And as "apathetic" at least somewhat still stresses the "a" at the beginning, and "orange" stresses the "o" at the beginning, they seemed to go well together.
Yes, I do have other material I haven't put here yet, which is longer than this, and possibly says a few more things. I'll let those poems out to play a little bit too if I feel they're ready to play.
Yes. Thank you very much for your appreciation and observation.
doesn't do anything for you?
--Fair enough.
Actually, to somewhat explain this little piece, I meant to have two mildly incompatible, yet slightly compatible ideas together in one phrase--apathy and healthfulness. And as "apathetic" at least somewhat still stresses the "a" at the beginning, and "orange" stresses the "o" at the beginning, they seemed to go well together.
Yes, I do have other material I haven't put here yet, which is longer than this, and possibly says a few more things. I'll let those poems out to play a little bit too if I feel they're ready to play.
Yes. Thank you very much for your appreciation and observation.
3rd Jul 2013 00:13am
Actually, it's my fault, in that enjoying what came before I
made it appear that I didn't enjoy this poem, which I did,
even without gleaning it's nuance, I loved the phonetic
sound of it. It rolled off my tongue when I spoke it out
loud.
made it appear that I didn't enjoy this poem, which I did,
even without gleaning it's nuance, I loved the phonetic
sound of it. It rolled off my tongue when I spoke it out
loud.
