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Need of the Hour !!!
I wish you were near
Sitting by my side
Watching me undress
planning to make a move instead.
Your hands reach out to mine
I gulp my share of wine
Ready to Give u the lifetime pleasure
A beautiful experience for us to treasure.
You beg me to follow you in the bathtub
Where souls meet and body starts to rub
The amazing fragrance and foam to cover
Indeed I never want this dream to get over.
I only wish if you were near
Those sensual moans I prefer to hear
The need of the hour is you my love
Can spend a zillion years wrapped in your arms in hell or above.
Sitting by my side
Watching me undress
planning to make a move instead.
Your hands reach out to mine
I gulp my share of wine
Ready to Give u the lifetime pleasure
A beautiful experience for us to treasure.
You beg me to follow you in the bathtub
Where souls meet and body starts to rub
The amazing fragrance and foam to cover
Indeed I never want this dream to get over.
I only wish if you were near
Those sensual moans I prefer to hear
The need of the hour is you my love
Can spend a zillion years wrapped in your arms in hell or above.
Published 14th Jun 2013
| Edited 5th Jul 2013
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14th Jun 2013 10:00pm
This is not bad for a first(?) ever erotic
It had imagery, passion n a nice flow
n the thing to remember is everytime u do one
You will get better at it... Exactly like anything else! :)
nice work :)
It had imagery, passion n a nice flow
n the thing to remember is everytime u do one
You will get better at it... Exactly like anything else! :)
nice work :)
14th Jun 2013 10:21pm
Yeah !! It was a first attempt on writing erotic.
Thanks a lot for such an encouraging comment :) Glad you liked it !
Thanks a lot for such an encouraging comment :) Glad you liked it !
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14th Jun 2013 10:38pm
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15th Jun 2013 3:49am
15th Jun 2013 4:25am
For a first time erotic piece, you've exceeded some of these poets who have been doing it for years :) I really love the softness of this piece! Xoxo
15th Jun 2013 9:16am
Thank you so much Rain ! I treasure your comments and thanks for appreciating sweets. Xoxo <3
15th Jun 2013 8:56am
Kinda gentle erotic poem that has this passion for love and not just lust.
Liked it :)
Liked it :)
15th Jun 2013 9:20am
Yeah ! Its true... I didn't wanna mix the two but then I end up with the want of love and not lust.
Thanks for sharing your comments. :)
Thanks for sharing your comments. :)
15th Jun 2013 10:40am
15th Jun 2013 6:36pm
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15th Jun 2013 3:49pm
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20th Aug 2013 8:19pm
watching d gal getting undress slowly nut not provoking instead calling...to set d fire nd pour d wine...into d glass of desire...let fire catch both d knees...nd move for drastic move....nd covered by transparent foam...bubbles of passion...on ur nose...lips...nd.....more...nd u wish ziilon yrs of hugs...dont bother be it happen in hell...
30th Oct 2013 8:52am
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31st Oct 2013 4:38am
As we English say "Not bad for a first attempt". You capture the narrator's need dramatically and as a reader I could imagine that need being well met in bath (in preference to bed) in verse three (my favourite verse).
25th Dec 2013 6:37am
15th Jul 2014 8:14pm
Sensual and filled with stimulating imagery. Makes me wonder what happened under the suds... jj
17th Jul 2014 6:54am
