A faint star's light

Ah, Gabriel, you sensitive soul... Thanks for your thoughts.

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Nice to see those wings unfurled...

Thank you, turtle

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Very sweet, Atakti, the love let loose in this poem. My only minor recommendation for the sake of symetry if nothing else is maybe ending the first line with balloon and starting line 2 with basket. All in all, a very nice job!

Thanks for the suggestion, Tony, done!

I appreciate your feedback.

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I'm glad, Kasupuu, thank you...

aww, sweet and lovely! great write :-)

Thank you, mikimoon!

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Sweet seems to be the word of the day here Atakti,  I dunno, I S'pose on the surface there migjt be a sweetness to it ..

wonderful job btw,  really a pleasure to read your shit missus

Glad you like readin' mah shee-it, Craic!

Cheers, boss.

Liked!  Thanks for the dreamy moment!

Dreamy... I'll take it, thanks, Mike!

I absolutely love the imagery here, and the sense of love I can feel, but the poem leaves an important question unanswered, who is it you want to share the planet with?
I think of it as a father figure, but it could also be a lover/loving figure as well.

I did enjoy this though gurl. Keep it up!

The only thing that matters is to free the joy... The words release.

Thanks, Matt. :)

nice write ataki....strider

Thanks, Mr Strider, sir!

Love the imagery in this piece Atakti.

"He bundles me up in his balloon
basket and lets go of the ropes.
I'm buoyant, free floating"

Like a breath of fresh air, I can feel the freedom.

Beautiful write. :)

Aww, thanks, Magdalena.

So glad the feeling translated...

This poem reads like a warm bath, and the culmination of a long narrative which exists before your first line. I can't really think of anything to say beyond that right now. Thank you for the read.

Pre-existing narrative... how astute of you Jack. I didn't even notice.  Thank you for your kind comments and the list add.

A Wonderful free-floating write-I Loved this!!!
Your writing has always been great, but the past few have been outstanding in form and delivery!!!
Perfect emotive Pen!!!

Your enthusiasm is appreciated, Soul. Glad you enjoyed!

The feeling of being weightless, like a feather on its way....greatly written and gave a dream like feeling, thanks for sharing Ataki!

Yes, a dreamy feather... Thank you, Mourganna

"to fly without strings"

how you make me think every time! :D

Pleased I could challenge you, 13...

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Think of us
down here
still unfurling
wings drying
waiting to fly..

Thank you Tank Girl  

Carpe, baby, you'll fly as soon as you let go.

Pleased you like it...

I really felt at peace when reading this. Thank you so much for the words.

You're welcome, Mike. I'm humbled that the poem affected you. Thank you for the list add...
 
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Atakti, I feel like I've stumbled into the middle of a scene in progress. I don't need the background because the now is whole and bouyant.
IMHO cadence is interrupted in a few places, such as basket needing to be on line one, anyone should be included in S4 L1, and than his moved up a line.
Again, just my opinion. Overall it's a lovely piece.

Yeah, I had "basket" on the first line, then someone suggested I move it. I tried it out, and I agree, the way I originally had it is better. Changed back!

I moved "anyone"... let's see how that sits with me.

Thanks so much for your feedback!  *beams at you*

Uplifting, like the words are weightless,
even though they hold so much.

One of my favorites of yours :)

Aww, thanks, Scribbler, pal of mine!

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"He offers me the space
between the stars
but I'm happy sharing
this planet."

Great pen Atakti!! I'm always weightless after reading your work. Thanks for sharing.

Thank you for stopping by, Dr Love, and leaving your words...

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