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When your hips come down, when
you enter me, I am thinking
of iambic pentameter. This is not
to say I don’t love you, that I am not
in the moment—rather, thrusting
in five beats, one short, one long, one
short, etc., amused to have you
rhythming me. I test you with a switch
to trochaic tetrameter, startle you
with an inexplicable spondee,
leave off with an ellipsis . . .
And when we flip, and my hips
come down, that moment I look at you
before straddling you? That, my love,
is a caesura.
*This poem also appears on Snakeskin:
http://homepages.nildram.co.uk/~simmers/175poetry.html
you enter me, I am thinking
of iambic pentameter. This is not
to say I don’t love you, that I am not
in the moment—rather, thrusting
in five beats, one short, one long, one
short, etc., amused to have you
rhythming me. I test you with a switch
to trochaic tetrameter, startle you
with an inexplicable spondee,
leave off with an ellipsis . . .
And when we flip, and my hips
come down, that moment I look at you
before straddling you? That, my love,
is a caesura.
*This poem also appears on Snakeskin:
http://homepages.nildram.co.uk/~simmers/175poetry.html
Written by
pyrategurrll
(Lauren Tivey)
Published 10th Nov 2010
| Edited 14th Apr 2012
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wow
10th Nov 2010 4:01am
you really know how to turn me on. thanks for the english lesson. very clever, and very sexy. all the best
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re: wow
10th Nov 2010 8:59pm
Scribbling Seduction
10th Nov 2010 7:16am
You have a way with making discipline and intellect in writing drive a man to weakness.
Manifestations of poetry mechanics are close to my heart and my pants. A well done serenade to the serpent.
Manifestations of poetry mechanics are close to my heart and my pants. A well done serenade to the serpent.
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re: Scribbling Seduction
10th Nov 2010 8:59pm
Fucking Literature
11th Nov 2010 12:54pm
Oh sweet sweet piece. It make Literature in English appealing.
I like this part: "And when we flip,"
You have written like a mature woman who has the license to enjoy the liberty of imagination.
To summarize it, this is sex in an English/Literature class and it is sweet.
I like this part: "And when we flip,"
You have written like a mature woman who has the license to enjoy the liberty of imagination.
To summarize it, this is sex in an English/Literature class and it is sweet.
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re: Fucking Literature
12th Nov 2010 00:33am
Thanks, Divine. I suppose it's one way to get my students interested in poetry. They told me yesterday they didn't like poetry because it's "boring." I said, "Oh...you're just not reading the right stuff! I will make you fall in love with poetry by the end of the semester. That's both a promise and a threat." :)
how...fun...is...that...
11th Nov 2010 7:30pm
re: how...fun...is...that...
12th Nov 2010 00:34am
Thanks, Jeff. I sometimes mess around with light & fun stuff between the more serious work. Glad you like.
Hmmmm
12th Nov 2010 11:12pm
I've never thought of poetic structure as sexy until now. Thanks for blowing my mind and rocking my literal world, figuratively. ;)
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re: Hmmmm
17th Nov 2010 3:11pm
Poetry
17th Jan 2011 9:33pm
Call it the fucking guide for English Literature Professors, literary erotica--awfully cute, Lauren. Love the last line: "that, my love, is a caesura." You've given me some wonderfully humorous ideas. Thank you.
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17th Jan 2011 9:35pm
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27th Nov 2012 2:07pm