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Demon in a bottle
There it is [/font]
On the table [/font]
Where I left it [/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
Every waking moment she calls to me[/font]
I hide my ears I try to fight [/font]
But I know every time I will give in[/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
Some days it gets to me and yells[/font]
“You’re worthless”[/font]
“Who the fuck could love you; you’re the definition of scum”[/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
I’ve tried in vain to destroy her[/font]
To crack her[/font]
To make her go away and just stop [/font]
But you can’t[/font]
[/font]
She will always and forever be[/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
On the table [/font]
Where I left it [/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
Every waking moment she calls to me[/font]
I hide my ears I try to fight [/font]
But I know every time I will give in[/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
Some days it gets to me and yells[/font]
“You’re worthless”[/font]
“Who the fuck could love you; you’re the definition of scum”[/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
I’ve tried in vain to destroy her[/font]
To crack her[/font]
To make her go away and just stop [/font]
But you can’t[/font]
[/font]
She will always and forever be[/font]
Demon in a bottle[/font]
Published 7th Nov 2010
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7th Nov 2010 11:11pm
as much as i liked the poem i feel as if the above lines didn't fit in:
Some days it gets to me and yells
“You’re worthless”
“Who the fuck could love you; you’re the definition of scum”
Some days it gets to me and yells
“You’re worthless”
“Who the fuck could love you; you’re the definition of scum”
7th Nov 2010 11:13pm
yeah i kinda got that feeling too i wasnt sure if it did fit in so i gave it a go thanks for your feedback Olive
7th Nov 2010 11:20pm
....try drinking for ten years, loose the kids the car the cash the pussy the friends the family the farm...then come back to it. This topic has been done soooo well, by the very very best, that you'd have to absolutley rip it up like the devil kicking us in the nuts to get it to pop...read Bukowski, then dare a redo :-)
(in other words I don't 'feel' you needing the bottle, I just hear you telling me)
(in other words I don't 'feel' you needing the bottle, I just hear you telling me)
7th Nov 2010 11:24pm
12th Nov 2010 10:13pm
what you're trying to get at but I have to agree that its a ghost of itself. Maybe you have been there and you just need to dig a little deeper. I can see what you're going for but I feel like you're not quite there, Crow. You'll know when you are.
