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Bleeding Child
Wipe your eyes bleeding child.
It's only just begun.
There are nightmares you are feeding
That fly to close to the sun.
If you let them take you
The water will surely rise.
A flood will come abruptly
And soon take over the skies.
Don't give in just yet.
There are worse things you will find
Than letting monsters in.
Hold on tight,
And stand your ground.
Don't be afraid to win.
It's only just begun.
There are nightmares you are feeding
That fly to close to the sun.
If you let them take you
The water will surely rise.
A flood will come abruptly
And soon take over the skies.
Don't give in just yet.
There are worse things you will find
Than letting monsters in.
Hold on tight,
And stand your ground.
Don't be afraid to win.
Published 23rd May 2013
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23rd May 2013 9:29pm
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24th May 2013 5:06am
Im quite impressed with you intellect at such a young age, thus disputing that age aint nothing but a number. :)
I really love the flow! The word 'Bleeding' seem to be a bit dark, but I really did enjoy this! Xo
I really love the flow! The word 'Bleeding' seem to be a bit dark, but I really did enjoy this! Xo
24th May 2013 5:12am
Thank you very much! :) This is the first I've written in awhile I actually liked. and I like the imagery it sets, crying, or hurting, isn't a strong enough point.
Bleeding indicates clear damage and implicates hardships. at least that's how I saw it :)
Bleeding indicates clear damage and implicates hardships. at least that's how I saw it :)
24th May 2013 5:57am
24th May 2013 1:21pm
The topic seems dark but the message is upbeat;notwithstanding,you're a good writer son and I like the subjects you take on. Well done
24th May 2013 11:32pm
