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Be{You}tiful
Everyone expects you to be perfect.
But you already are,
Don’t try to be what they want
Be who you want to be
And love yourself.
They knock you down
They make you cry
They won’t stop
Till you can’t take it.
Don’t let them touch you
You are stronger than they will ever be
Smile gorgeous,
Don’t let that tiara fall.
But you already are,
Don’t try to be what they want
Be who you want to be
And love yourself.
They knock you down
They make you cry
They won’t stop
Till you can’t take it.
Don’t let them touch you
You are stronger than they will ever be
Smile gorgeous,
Don’t let that tiara fall.
Published 21st May 2013
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Everyone expects you to be perfect
but you already are.
Don’t try to be what they want,
be who you want to be
and love yourself.
They knock you down
and they make you cry
and they won’t stop
until you can’t take it. (I, personally, think the 'and's help and the 'till' does not show use of language effectively. These changes could help?)
Don’t let them touch you.
You are stronger than they will ever be
Smile, gorgeous, (Remember if you're calling someone a name there should be a comma before and after)
don’t let that tiara fall.
Thoroughly positive and kind, soft. Is this about you or intended to a friend? If it's a friend possibly a dedication would help? If it's you I would change it to 'I's because if you read it as 'I's it's very strong and positive. Remember Word Processor and the like will capitalise all of your lines and when using enjambment this does not read as well. Well done.
but you already are.
Don’t try to be what they want,
be who you want to be
and love yourself.
They knock you down
and they make you cry
and they won’t stop
until you can’t take it. (I, personally, think the 'and's help and the 'till' does not show use of language effectively. These changes could help?)
Don’t let them touch you.
You are stronger than they will ever be
Smile, gorgeous, (Remember if you're calling someone a name there should be a comma before and after)
don’t let that tiara fall.
Thoroughly positive and kind, soft. Is this about you or intended to a friend? If it's a friend possibly a dedication would help? If it's you I would change it to 'I's because if you read it as 'I's it's very strong and positive. Remember Word Processor and the like will capitalise all of your lines and when using enjambment this does not read as well. Well done.
