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haiku (air)
I surface in your presence
and breathe you in
like a sea breeze into drowning lungs
and breathe you in
like a sea breeze into drowning lungs
Published 29th Oct 2010
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29th Oct 2010 9:06pm
Nathan, this is so enchanting. you've perfectly captured the essence of love's desperate urgency and its sudden and complete satisfaction. thank you.
29th Oct 2010 11:35pm
and thank you for your kind words.. glad you dig this piece.. cheers!
29th Jan 2011 2:40am
There's such a sadness here. It links the obsession but the 'drowning' just almost warns of what's to come and that's what I like about it.
30th Jan 2011 1:22pm
