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She is Stronger
I held myself up
Far too long
I want to break
I want to fall
It is too
Exhausting
Pretending
That it's okay
That I am
Okay
It doesn't
Comfort
Me
I see behind
My pathetic rouse
The demon inside
Wants to be free
To mourn
Like she was
Meant too
It's too late
If I let her
Through
I will be
Unfixable
Any efforts
To have a life
Instantly futile
I would sink into
The black ooze
Like quicksand
I will eventually
Be engulfed
Unretrievable
She use to be weak
But she is getting
Stronger
So much
Stronger
Or maybe
I am becoming
Weaker
Either way
Her screams
Similar to
The call of a siren
But much out of tune
My ears drip with pain
Her long nails taring out
My intestines
Scraping
Cutting
Digging
Trying to
Get out
Everyday
It gets louder
Everyday
It becomes harder to ignore
Everyday
It is getting stronger
Everyday
I am closer
To letting
It free
Letting
Her free
Letting
Me
Free
Far too long
I want to break
I want to fall
It is too
Exhausting
Pretending
That it's okay
That I am
Okay
It doesn't
Comfort
Me
I see behind
My pathetic rouse
The demon inside
Wants to be free
To mourn
Like she was
Meant too
It's too late
If I let her
Through
I will be
Unfixable
Any efforts
To have a life
Instantly futile
I would sink into
The black ooze
Like quicksand
I will eventually
Be engulfed
Unretrievable
She use to be weak
But she is getting
Stronger
So much
Stronger
Or maybe
I am becoming
Weaker
Either way
Her screams
Similar to
The call of a siren
But much out of tune
My ears drip with pain
Her long nails taring out
My intestines
Scraping
Cutting
Digging
Trying to
Get out
Everyday
It gets louder
Everyday
It becomes harder to ignore
Everyday
It is getting stronger
Everyday
I am closer
To letting
It free
Letting
Her free
Letting
Me
Free
Published 19th May 2013
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19th May 2013 8:44pm
I really like the lines "Everyday/ I am closer/ To letting/ It free/ Letting/ Her free/ Letting/
Me/ Free." My interpretation of the poem was the "she" clawing inside of you represents your depression or your need to mourn over losses but you don't want to because you want to move on and be happy.
This is just a suggestion, but what'd you think about changing "Letting/ Her free/ Letting/ Me/ Free" into "Letting/ Her free/ Letting/ Her have me?" The reason I'm suggesting this is because if the "she" inside of you represents an emotion you feel may overwhelm you, but isn't actually who you are, maybe... I don't know. Just an idea. Obviously, you have total control over your own poem but I thought I'd give a little critique of my own.
The poem is well written, but the title doesn't seem to fit the poem. The poem sounds like you're struggling to keep from drowning in your emotions, not like you're able to stay strong. I'm not saying there's anything "weak" about feeling emotions, though.
Good poem. Thanks for taking the time to post :)
Me/ Free." My interpretation of the poem was the "she" clawing inside of you represents your depression or your need to mourn over losses but you don't want to because you want to move on and be happy.
This is just a suggestion, but what'd you think about changing "Letting/ Her free/ Letting/ Me/ Free" into "Letting/ Her free/ Letting/ Her have me?" The reason I'm suggesting this is because if the "she" inside of you represents an emotion you feel may overwhelm you, but isn't actually who you are, maybe... I don't know. Just an idea. Obviously, you have total control over your own poem but I thought I'd give a little critique of my own.
The poem is well written, but the title doesn't seem to fit the poem. The poem sounds like you're struggling to keep from drowning in your emotions, not like you're able to stay strong. I'm not saying there's anything "weak" about feeling emotions, though.
Good poem. Thanks for taking the time to post :)
