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Fizmo
Just two.......
.......lay them high upon the
rim of your crystal glass
and with scarlet lips mistress,
tip me in.....
.......deep into to your
lustful, morbid, heated sin,
I go.
I've fallen into your warm, wet
chemical overflow.
Tossing, turning
thrusting up
forced back down
Agitated.....
......can you hear that effervescent
bubbling sound
inside your creamy white flow
Just......
.........as I think my toes hit the bottom,
up again, I go.
Where do I begin?
When shall it end?
Such a forceful torrent,
a chemical reaction.
Feels so good, so surreal
I can no longer pretend......
......as my mind fades
into loud white noize
I close my blackened eyes
within your death grip
your wings squeeze me tightly.........
.......my eros heart, overjoyed.
"pop pop, fizz fizz
oh what a *release* it is"
( .......entered in the Erotic Challenge 5/16/2013 )
.......lay them high upon the
rim of your crystal glass
and with scarlet lips mistress,
tip me in.....
.......deep into to your
lustful, morbid, heated sin,
I go.
I've fallen into your warm, wet
chemical overflow.
Tossing, turning
thrusting up
forced back down
Agitated.....
......can you hear that effervescent
bubbling sound
inside your creamy white flow
Just......
.........as I think my toes hit the bottom,
up again, I go.
Where do I begin?
When shall it end?
Such a forceful torrent,
a chemical reaction.
Feels so good, so surreal
I can no longer pretend......
......as my mind fades
into loud white noize
I close my blackened eyes
within your death grip
your wings squeeze me tightly.........
.......my eros heart, overjoyed.
"pop pop, fizz fizz
oh what a *release* it is"
( .......entered in the Erotic Challenge 5/16/2013 )
Published 15th May 2013
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15th May 2013 3:04am
Having read the other composition I was in a mood for music. This had me thinking of Raphael Saadiq---that is until I saw the ending. Then I couldn't help but think of the "Plop Plop Fizz Fizz", from the Alka Seltzer commercials and with the picture, I couldn't stop laughing.
15th May 2013 3:18am
I was trying hard to to stay within the competition guidelines. Tried to make this as "metaphorically scintillating" as possible. The whole thing was kind of built on our favorite stomach remedy.....in a sexy way ; ) Took me back to this one:
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56177-oooooooooh-sheeeeeeeet/ 8^o
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56177-oooooooooh-sheeeeeeeet/ 8^o
15th May 2013 4:41am
Anonymous
15th May 2013 8:20am
Scintillating, indeed. Effervescent, even.
The pic made me giggle, though.
The pic made me giggle, though.
Anonymous
15th May 2013 4:27pm
MrM,
Your 'release' was perfectly timed! LOL!!! Enjoyed Bro!
tornado
Your 'release' was perfectly timed! LOL!!! Enjoyed Bro!
tornado
15th May 2013 4:35pm
15th May 2013 8:04pm
