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I Wait
I'm waiting for you
Sitting at the table
Wearing the boyfriend shirt
Unbuttoned and naked
One leg resting on the table
The other swaying back and forth
Light from the candle flickers off my skin
I blow smoke rings just as you enter
Catching your body inside one before it fades
You don't blink you just let me soak into you
I put my cigarette out and finger you closer
My hands undo your pants slowly
Your palm cups my center firmly
We both smile and say " Dinner?"
Sitting at the table
Wearing the boyfriend shirt
Unbuttoned and naked
One leg resting on the table
The other swaying back and forth
Light from the candle flickers off my skin
I blow smoke rings just as you enter
Catching your body inside one before it fades
You don't blink you just let me soak into you
I put my cigarette out and finger you closer
My hands undo your pants slowly
Your palm cups my center firmly
We both smile and say " Dinner?"
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Re: I Wait
Anonymous
13th May 2013 8:52pm
A lustful piece, nice. But there was a part in this that confused me. The line "Catching your body inside one before it fades" it sounds like he's cheating on you, and then it goes on about you about to get down and dirty with him. Is that what you were aiming for? Or am I just misinterpreting the piece?
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re: Re: I Wait
13th May 2013 8:55pm
The smoke ring ...I see him inside it before it disappears!
He enters the room at the perfect time... :)
Thank you for reading _m_L_
He enters the room at the perfect time... :)
Thank you for reading _m_L_
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Anonymous
13th May 2013 9:03pm
OOOOHHHH okay. I'm sorry about that must have read it a little too fast. No problem hun.
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13th May 2013 9:18pm
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Anonymous
13th May 2013 9:36pm
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13th May 2013 9:44pm
I agree...dinner, dessert....snack time...lol :)
Much appreciated Amanecio! ;-)
Much appreciated Amanecio! ;-)
Re: I Wait
Anonymous
13th May 2013 9:41pm
So visual tl
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13th May 2013 9:46pm
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Anonymous
13th May 2013 10:15pm
tommielynn,
Seduction, it's whats for dinner! ; ) The main course should simmer nice and slow like this write. Enjoyed!
tornado
Seduction, it's whats for dinner! ; ) The main course should simmer nice and slow like this write. Enjoyed!
tornado
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Re: I Wait
14th May 2013 5:46am
Eating out much? (Sorry...that was bad, but I couldn't help myself) Very Nice work!!!
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14th May 2013 9:13am