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Break Down
Break down
All the walls
Crimson shown
With your calls
Where's the soul
When you live
Where's the heart
When you die
At least try
To survive
With violet love
In our arms
Whats wrong dear
Why the tears
Come in here
I want to cheer
You up, Inside
Make your heart mine
Do you mind
I'm inside
You, now
All the walls
Crimson shown
With your calls
Where's the soul
When you live
Where's the heart
When you die
At least try
To survive
With violet love
In our arms
Whats wrong dear
Why the tears
Come in here
I want to cheer
You up, Inside
Make your heart mine
Do you mind
I'm inside
You, now
Published 24th Oct 2010
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25th Oct 2010 3:29am
The poem was great and very well executed emotion wise, as usual. But if I could suggest something perhaps you should widen your vocabulary some more. Being odd and somewhat crazy with vocabulary can add a awesome twist to any poem. Other than that I loved it, good job. :)
25th Oct 2010 3:49am
Thank youu. And on the vocabulary thing; I'm just getting used to my style and figuring different things out, once I do...vocabulary will be out the wazoooo.
25th Oct 2010 10:53am
