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A Toast
An amazing carnal feast you did offer
a beautiful submission now almost complete
I shall drink to my own immortality
Here's to you as you die at my feet
Cheers...
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Re: A Toast
3rd May 2013 6:19am
re: Re: A Toast
3rd May 2013 6:22am
guess I was feeling a lil dark tonight lol
stay tuned...
can't wait to finish our conversation
will get back to you tomorrow!!!
stay tuned...
can't wait to finish our conversation
will get back to you tomorrow!!!
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3rd May 2013 6:43am
Re: A Toast
3rd May 2013 12:40pm
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3rd May 2013 5:40pm
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3rd May 2013 5:40pm
Re: A Toast
Anonymous
3rd May 2013 3:03pm
Deborahlee3313,
.....and the night shall be forever young! So much to imagine in so few lines! Nice and arousing ; )
tornado
.....and the night shall be forever young! So much to imagine in so few lines! Nice and arousing ; )
tornado
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re: Re: A Toast
3rd May 2013 5:41pm
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3rd May 2013 6:34pm
thank you very much
I just changes a word in the last line
from
here's to you as you lay at my feet
to
here's to you as you die at my feet
(after all, she has been bled out)
I just changes a word in the last line
from
here's to you as you lay at my feet
to
here's to you as you die at my feet
(after all, she has been bled out)
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3rd May 2013 7:10pm
Re: A Toast
4th May 2013 8:35am
U included so many feelings in just four lines and a word...really good
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4th May 2013 6:12pm
Re: A Toast
28th Jun 2013 9:42am
The picture kind of made me forget I was reading a poem for about 30 seconds to be honest
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28th Jun 2013 6:29pm
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7th Jul 2013 11:27am
Re: A Toast
Anonymous
28th Jun 2013 2:44pm
Stunning
The poem and the image work fantastically together.
Excellent work
With admiration
Kitty
The poem and the image work fantastically together.
Excellent work
With admiration
Kitty
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re: Re: A Toast
28th Jun 2013 6:04pm