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mangled corpse... its over now...scream goodbye
(this is quite a revengeful poem as you probably guessed. enjoy. and please comment)
Twisted malicious thoughts swim through my mind
in a frenzy of sorrow and revengefulness.
One night i'll abduct you and play my little games
to mess with your mind and scar your flesh...
I'll tie you down to the ground and gag you
sharpen my knife till it's half blunt.
Pain is coming your way my ex true love
the lies cause your death as payment ...
My ears worship your barrage of screams
my eyes desire your bitter blood.
Each carving has it's own special meaning
with each deeper wound there is a flood...
This sweet insanity caught hold of me
spun my reality into a dream.
You'll harm no others now my dear
i'm gunna torture you with all your fears...
I shall skin you alive to make a trophy
for my cabinet to remember this day.
A sick mind is what you moulded for me
this is what you get if it's me you betray...
I'm gunna scar your tainted soul with my name
so when your burning in hell you'll scream it.
I want to know you're suffering in this nightmare
to the grave your mutilated remains shall commit...
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Twisted malicious thoughts swim through my mind
in a frenzy of sorrow and revengefulness.
One night i'll abduct you and play my little games
to mess with your mind and scar your flesh...
I'll tie you down to the ground and gag you
sharpen my knife till it's half blunt.
Pain is coming your way my ex true love
the lies cause your death as payment ...
My ears worship your barrage of screams
my eyes desire your bitter blood.
Each carving has it's own special meaning
with each deeper wound there is a flood...
This sweet insanity caught hold of me
spun my reality into a dream.
You'll harm no others now my dear
i'm gunna torture you with all your fears...
I shall skin you alive to make a trophy
for my cabinet to remember this day.
A sick mind is what you moulded for me
this is what you get if it's me you betray...
I'm gunna scar your tainted soul with my name
so when your burning in hell you'll scream it.
I want to know you're suffering in this nightmare
to the grave your mutilated remains shall commit...
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Published 11th Oct 2010
| Edited 12th Oct 2010
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12th Oct 2010 2:53pm
sarah this is so disturbing! i fuking LOVE it!!!
the use of words in this makes it so creepy and sinister.
and may i add that the picure adds to the creppy feel of the poem. nice choice.
i'm sorry to here about the relationship break down...keep strong sweety and you deserve better than him anyways.
as a writer you have shown you can go darker and darker, you are utterly amazing sarah. keep up the fab work!
line 5 feels slightly erotic like you're getting pleasure from the evil deed, and line 7 is simply brilliant.
i like the slight rhyming style and messy yet neat structure.
the detail and imagery you percieve in this poem is just amazing.
you make us all proud with your masterpieces, and i enjoy reading them so much. you're such an emotional writer and so talented.
please write more and publish them so i can read! -hugsss-
chin up you'll be fine. and revenge is sweet my my friend, especially the images you bring out to us ;)
and i can't compliment this poem enough and i dont see how i can critise it in any negative way. by the way it scared me did i mention that o_O *insert laugh here* xxx
the use of words in this makes it so creepy and sinister.
and may i add that the picure adds to the creppy feel of the poem. nice choice.
i'm sorry to here about the relationship break down...keep strong sweety and you deserve better than him anyways.
as a writer you have shown you can go darker and darker, you are utterly amazing sarah. keep up the fab work!
line 5 feels slightly erotic like you're getting pleasure from the evil deed, and line 7 is simply brilliant.
i like the slight rhyming style and messy yet neat structure.
the detail and imagery you percieve in this poem is just amazing.
you make us all proud with your masterpieces, and i enjoy reading them so much. you're such an emotional writer and so talented.
please write more and publish them so i can read! -hugsss-
chin up you'll be fine. and revenge is sweet my my friend, especially the images you bring out to us ;)
and i can't compliment this poem enough and i dont see how i can critise it in any negative way. by the way it scared me did i mention that o_O *insert laugh here* xxx
12th Oct 2010 2:56pm
thanks launa your too kind to me...
your lovely comments brought tears to my eyes :')
glad you noticed the sexual style on line 5 lol
thank you for reading, commenting and adding this poem to your reading list :)
ly x
your lovely comments brought tears to my eyes :')
glad you noticed the sexual style on line 5 lol
thank you for reading, commenting and adding this poem to your reading list :)
ly x
13th Oct 2010 6:37am
Loved each disturbed line above I worship those ideas as my corrupted soul weeps since too long ago and noone has notice this pain I bear !
13th Oct 2010 6:52am
13th Oct 2010 8:10am
thank you both so much for reading and for you lovely comments! so much appreciated :) xx
19th Oct 2010 4:26pm
this was simply great! right now, i'm going through a similar pain, and it this poem made my day. I fucking love you!
19th Oct 2010 5:04pm
hahah im so glad you like it :)
thank you once again for reading and commenting
xx
